Sophiascb

United States

i'm blonde but surely not dumb. ♥
i am the accumulation of my inspirations and everything i ever thought was cool.
est. january 10, 2k21
she/her

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trying to inspire ;)

i love shadowhunters, neal shusterman works, and am a ravenclaw

i dance and cheer

published in flare journal and burn magazine @ boston u

happy reading, my work, and the lovely brains of others ;)

a disappointed heart

February 14, 2021

FREE WRITING

5
When it storms on a Tuesday
And you weren't prepared
So your sneakers get soaked 
While the sky smiles grim and gray
Standing up out of a wheelchair
After years absent of steps
And collapsing in exhaustion
All your tedious hope left bare
An objection from the one you left behind
Cuts a wonderful and wild wedding cake
And the piercing pain of uncertainty 
That has never quite left your mind
They seem like extraordinary gifts at first
And then you trip over the universe
No end to any beginnings
Begging for a disappointed heart to burst 
ok I really don't know if I like the rhyme scheme here, and this is kind of out of my comfort zone, writing about things that I haven't experienced. It felt weird, like I was viewing through opera glasses. lmk if you like. Edited! I like this much better now. old version is under "that's tough" 
"a disappointed heart" seems pretty fitting for Valentine's Day. ;/

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5 Comments
  • BizzleWrites

    Wow. I don't really know what to comment, but just...WOW. This is such a beautiful piece of poetry.


    3 months ago
  • Zirong

    wow this is really good. It flows so well. Amazing work!


    3 months ago
  • Yellow Sweater

    Re: Thank you so much! It makes me so happy that you appreciate my pieces.

    It really depends on the day and how much homwork I have, but I'd say on average a half an hour to an hour. A lot of that is consumed by writer's block though. Lol.

    As for advice, ok, this might sound a little pretentious and abstract, but don;t be afraid of contradiction. I think oxymoron and juxtaposition are some of the most powerful literary tools. Though I just read your piece and you definitely don't need to hear this advice! "the sky smiles grim and gray/ Standing up out of a wheelchair" ... "tedious hope" .... This piece is full of exquisite dualities!


    3 months ago
  • _Delphiruns2theocean_

    Re: Thanks! More to come!


    3 months ago
  • Rival

    this is good soph. REALLY good


    3 months ago