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Hey, guys! I hope you love this new song!

dungeon

March 15, 2021

FREE WRITING

7
Lost for you
It’s not true
Brighten the dark
Rain in the park
Do not disrespect your heart
Hearing what it needs, ignoring all its pleas
My feelings mean nothing
Life in a dungeon
Locked away in the dark
Can you let me go?
Can you let it go?

Is it wrong to show?
Can I freely grow?
Burned in the night 
Tortured by fright
Can you let me go?
Can you let it go?
Hidden in despair
I want you all to know?
Doomed in the dungeon
Alone
Like home

Am I worth nothing?
Because I’m hiding something?
Locked away in the dark
Can you let me go?
Can you let it go?
Is it wrong to show?
Can I freely grow?
Burned in the night 
Tortured by fright
Can you let me go?
Can you let it go?

Hidden in despair
I want you all to know?
Doomed in the dungeon
I need to know if the village will love me
‘Cause if they don’t, nobody will set me free
I needed to go 'cause I needed to know you don't need me
You reap what you saw, but it seems like you don't even see me
You say it to me like something I have any choice in
If I wasn't important, then why would you waste all your poison?

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8 Comments
  • First Name Last Name

    ooOH! the last line hits super hard! its very very good! and the rhyming really brings it all together! awesome job!


    6 months ago
  • Nyla

    RE: Ohhhh, I thought you were saying it as "reap what you sow" but "saw" makes a lot of sense as well! I'm too stuck to my ways I guess lol! And awww, thank you so much- you're super kind as well :)))


    6 months ago
  • Nyla

    I really like this song because most of the lines are short that it's very easy to read! "Am I worth nothing?/ Because I’m hiding something?" was very powerful and really hit hard. I also love the let me go, let it go because it hints at more of a deepness beyond the words which was very cool! Also, did you mean "sow" instead of "saw"? Or is that just how you spell it?-In which case ignore me :) RE: Omg awww, Iyt! I'm so happy you love my comments!! And I mean every last word- you're going to do so amazing in life :) Also, I love reading your work because to be honest, my tone-deaf self sometimes starts singing them XD And thank you- your comments always brighten my day as well. You're a very sweet person!!! :)


    6 months ago
  • nopenopenope

    sorry, use this link:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/223788/version/470987


    7 months ago
  • nopenopenope

    Hey! I just wanted to let you know that a new chapter of "Three Sisters" is out if you want to take a look at it, if you want.
    Also, this piece is beautiful - I love it.

    Link to the chapter:

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/223788/version/470689


    7 months ago
  • Jj101

    Re: Aww, thanks! That’s so sweet! My heart<3


    7 months ago
  • cloudi

    re: thank you so much!!! I've never been told that I had talent hahaha


    7 months ago
  • Remaking_The_World

    Re: Thank you so much!
    This is a very beautiful and melancholy piece! I think it would be a really pretty song :)


    7 months ago