Anne Blackwood

United States

16
Christian
Theatre kid
Singer (soprano)
Poet
Twin (fraternal)
Spoonie
Disfusive
Highly Sensitive Person
Living oxymoron
Kindness Krusader: Blueberry cotton candy
XXFJ, Melancholic-Sanguine, ambivert

Joined 1/16/20

Message to Readers

I edited the chorus a bit, added a second half to verse two, and wrote a bridge.
Now that I have a bridge, is the tag necessary? Is that even the correct term?
Should I change the chorus back to the first version?
And finally, should I keep the segment labels (verse 1, bridge, etc) in or delete them?

Tell That

February 10, 2021


[Verse 1]

He wants to buy me shoes and a diamond ring
There's heart beat-beating through everything
I know that I should break this link
But I can't convince myself...

He is dangerous and so far gone
Wants to fly off-limits 'til we forget the dawn
We are writing a deadly song
Don't think this is ending well...

[Chorus]

But tell that to my heart
And my dancing feet
Tell that to the sparks
And the way he looks at me

Oh tell that to me
Could you tell that to me

[Verse 2]

I feel fireworks like warning shots
And fill my eyes with forget-me-nots
My safety net is getting caught
I should say I hate his stare...

Driving off the Earth, sun in our minds
Leaving flames in our wake 'cause we're love blind
Tasting youth in the pain we find
This is a treacherous affair...

[Chorus]

But tell that to my heart
And my dancing feet
Tell that to the sparks
And the way he looks at me

Oh tell that to me
Could you tell that to me

[Tag]

Oh tell that, tell that to me
Tell that, tell that to me, me, me
I don't think you could, don't think you could

[Bridge]

Catch a comet
Let it fly
Stand upon it
Tell the world goodbye

Take me dancing
On the moon
Don't speak of landing
We can't be doomed

[Chorus]

Tell that to my heart
And my dancing feet
Tell that to the sparks
The way he looks at me

Oh tell that to me
Could you tell that to me

Don't tell that--
I had no plans to write anything for this competition. Ever since I embraced poetry as the form of expression that works best for me, I haven't been inspired to write a full song (just the occasional little voice memo). But this song was tickling my mind for hours before I finally got it out all in one go.

Note: I do not recommend ignoring red flags or incompatibility because just because you really like someone. This is just a fun song.

*See message board in the first draft for personal background.*

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    Re: hiya! Thank you, Blue! I’m great, thank you! How’re you? I’ve been pretty busy though! I’m hoping we get snow tomorrow; there’s supposed to be some on the way!


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