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Lmk what you think! Are the lyrics... alright, i suppose? (my brother went ew at sweaty palms but I was reluctant to take it out) Does the "storyline" make some sense?

Blue Jacket Skies

February 9, 2021

It’s august again
new jacket round her heart
pockets filled with sweaty palms
before the storm, the silent calm

She pounds the sidewalks with her shoes
Looks up around, without a clue
Remember seeing her?
September, being her

do you see how she shimmers with new marker blue
but think how the new girl flew

Cause in her blue jacket skies, she felt warm
and in those stiff jean hi’s, she made friends
and in these black hair ties, she’d stay up all night
wondering if she got her first chances right

invisible lines drawn through the dirt
happiness hides in the folds of her skirt
do you see how she fits in
how their laughter begins, look at her

and yeah they glitter with best friend blue
no matter what kind of storm blew through

cause in their blue jacket skies, they feel warm
and in these worn jean eyes, they stay friends
and in those black hair ties, they stay up all night
capturing the memories in jars like fireflies

but with every high, there’s a low
and some days, youth will tall take its toll
and sometimes boys and drama are all it takes
to turn clear skies gray

and yeah she glows with growing pain blue
Because even she paid time her dues

she’d wish for blue jacket skies, so she’d feel warm
with faded jean goodbyes, old polaroids
and with the black hair ties, she’d stay up all night
remembering the dusty, silver-lined times

so live for blue jacket skies, so you feel warm
say faded jean goodbyes, but make new friends
and with the black hair ties, let’s stay up all night

live in our firefly, blue jacket skies
I'm still working on the melodies a bit with the verses, but hopefully I can that and record before the 16th... 


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  • Yellow Sweater

    Re: Haha no. I think that was one of the biggest problems is I had no sense of rhythm or melody while is was writing the lyrics. I am pretty much completely tone deaf, so I don't know what I was thinking. I will probably just end up submitting a poem for the comp and hope I can pass it off as lyrics. lol.

    9 months ago
  • Madelyn (Carolina Girl)

    I really like this. It is gorgeous. Hello new friend :)

    9 months ago
  • Yellow Sweater

    Re: thank you so much for your comment and your brilliant suggestions. I love your idea for accentuating the musical motif. Also, how in the world did you write such an amazing song!!!?

    9 months ago