Ava Marie

Canada

Hi I'm Ava
15
She/Her

Aspiring Author
Dancer
Rock Climber

Always laughing
Beatlemaniac
Favourite book: The Book Thief by Markus Zusak
Bad jokes are the best!
I draw occasionally
I love constructive criticism!

Joined: 11/14/2020

Message to Readers

Please give suggestions for a better title!

Last Moments

February 7, 2021

PROMPT: 25 Words

8
A tear rolled down her cheek, softly, silently, steadily.
This was the end.
Her lungs shook as she inhaled one last breath.
She was gone.

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5 Comments
  • useless :)

    wow. i agree, this is tragic, yet so beautifully portrayed. you captured so much emotion and so vividly, i could envision the scene as i was reading. great job :)


    3 months ago
  • Emi

    This is so tragic and yet really beautiful. You capture her last moments in a really poignant way.


    3 months ago
  • BlueWolf (Semi Hiatus)

    I liked this. I liked the descriptions. Good job doing that in 25 words!!! I like the tittle. You could maybe change it to something that tells the reader more about thee situation or the context. But I like it!


    3 months ago
  • Ava Marie

    Thank you. My problem is that I was trying to find three different words and couldn't find another one that started with D and went with the other two.


    3 months ago
  • SunV

    This is amazing! And the title is really apt, but if you want to, maybe you can write 'Going, going, gone' (I think that's a song title, but it will still fit here...)


    3 months ago