Treblemaker

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I write because the music of language spoke to me in books and I wanted to make a beautiful noise to answer back -- Lee Martin

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The noblest art is that of making others happy- PT Barnum

Secrete Child of Apollo, Aquarius, 17

In love with Mint Ice cream but all ice cream is greatly appreciated

Favorite TV show is the Umbrella Academy

You are braver than you think, kinder than you seem, and smarter than you know.

Joined 10/5/2020

Aquarius

February 12, 2021

https://soundcloud.com/user-62521970/aquarious/s-WW0D56Gf8L6

.[Intro] 
Sometimes I feel eaten by death.
Pressured, pampered voices compressed. 
Crashing through the silence
And the voices can't keep quite.
I'm drowning on a river of death.

[chorus]
But I know somehow that I will be ok.
And I know deep down that I will find my way
And I hope to god
I beg and plead and I pray--
I'll be stronger than the water.

[verse]
please beware the water is black.
all the bravery that I lack,
melted through my armor
cant seem to get warmer,
I'm freezing on a river of death.

[Chorus]
But I know somehow I won't move astray//sanded shores are sharp crystal tears

Though my eyes, they burn as I bear the spray//whispers and the echoes of fears 

And I hope to god I beg and plead and I pray//shattering the silence, and I swear they wont be quite 

I'll be stronger than the water//I'm sinking on a river of death

[bridge]
Water going over my head
Pray 
Can't keep pushing 'gainst all the dead
pray

Bobbing down a river of death
                                fray and cracked the silence ink black
                                                                          Dragging me down gotta fight back
                                                                                                            Let me break free!
[chorus]
When the walls crash down I known I'll be ok
And the tides to high I will bend the spray,
And I hope to god
I beg and plead and I pray--
I'll be stronger I'll be stronger!

When there is no path I will be ok
And the stars snuff out I know I'll light my way
Cause I know, inside,
I'm sure, I know and I'll pray--
I'll be stronger I am stronger!

I'll be stronger than the water.

[outro]
When the tides too high I know I'll break away
And the waves to strong I know I'll find my way
Cause I know myself, and in my heart I will say--
I'll be stronger, I am stronger.
 
https://soundcloud.com/user-62521970/aquarious/s-WW0D56Gf8L6
This is about feeling completely overwhelmed. Its like a constant wave of stress that makes you anxious and dizzy and uncertain. Drowning in the small things you have to get done, the expectations put on you, I related that overwhelming feeling to water. In this, the protagonist overcomes those overwhelming feelings, they refused to doubt themselves, to lose hope in themselves and their ability to handle everything gracefully. Its not easy, and I don't know when it gets easier, but I do know that you too are so strong.
On a separate note I didn't want to sing this because I do *not* like my singing voice at all, and so 13 tracks and two days later here is the song on violin and viola instead.

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6 Comments
  • anemoia (#words)

    also the fact that you play violin and viola—that is so cool. i just love violin music. the song sounds so magical.


    3 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    wow, this is lovely. you convey such a relatable feeling.
    i just noticed that we joined the same day! wow.


    3 months ago
  • nolongeractive

    Re: Thanks so much!


    3 months ago
  • rosewater

    re: thanks so much for the reply and the peer review!! all the best in the competition :DD


    3 months ago
  • nolongeractive

    This is such an amazing song and I really relate to it. You have so much talent - I am in awe of you; you give Ariana Grande a run for her money. If you maybe have time to peer review one of my songs, (the one I submitted for the competition is called 'Gatekeeper' - best of luck in the competition. Much love!


    3 months ago
  • rosewater

    good work! the lyrics are poignant and meaningful.
    the cover is also really nice, though the rhythm seems to fall apart a bit at the last chorus (the highest violin with the quavers stick out slightly because of that) feel free to correct me if im wrong, but it seems to be because the main melody in the chorus lags slightly so the upper voice sounds rushed in comparison. love the layers though!
    also if you see this, where'd you get the drumbeat? it sounds super cool :D


    3 months ago