Yellow Sweater

United States

(Formerly Zinniav)

I'm 17, interested in linguistics, mathematics, philosophy, theology, and history.

She/ Her | Bi | Disabled | Agnostic | Useless Intellectual | WA

I don't necessarily agree with my own assertions.

Message to Readers

Does this actually elicit an emotional response or is it too abstract?

The Metronome

February 12, 2021

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I am terrified of what it means to be alive,  
terrified of the queasy absurdity of living, 
the spring-flower-hot-oil rhythm of life.  

Trilling along a relentless number-line, 
we step over our self-constructed cliffs.
I think mathematical relationships are proof

that God is real and that we discovered Him. 
Our good-bad heartbeats are caught between
the loose geometry of falling-dead leaves 

and a cruel metronome.
In this poem, I use Him when referring to God both because it's familiar and because the male Abrahamic God was an especially influential human discovery:)    

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5 Comments
  • Coeur

    This poem is amazing-- the mathematical thematic imagery as it pertains to a "metronome" is amazing. I really like the concept of a wildly changing metronome representing the chaos yet order of life. I'd also say that it CERTAINLY elicited an emotional response. As someone else said I think, it gave me chills.


    3 months ago
  • remi'sgotinkstains

    "spring-flower-hot-oil rhythm" well, that's just an awesome cluster of words! it brings a smile to my face when i read that line. I also like "our good-bad heartbeats" . . . ain't that the truth!


    3 months ago
  • Caleb Urlacher

    my goshhh. chills.

    "I think mathematical relationships are proof

    that God is real and that we discovered Him.
    Our good-bad heartbeats are caught between
    the loose geometry of falling-dead leaves"


    3 months ago
  • Emily Jasmine

    So beautifully written! <3


    3 months ago
  • astrea

    wow this is beautiful


    3 months ago