barelybear

United Kingdom

she/her, INFJ-A
musicals
fantasy/dystopian fiction
piano
life goal = becoming fluent in le français
☕️
est August 2020
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They tell me I’m 16 but I’m sceptical
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Message to Readers

I know I said the last one was gonna be the final, but I just got this amazing review in this morning, so I had to ahah.
Im not sure if it allows you to make changes after a first submitted final draft, but I guess we’ll find out.
Thanks for all the feedback! Everyone has been really kind and helpful :)

Shadow

February 16, 2021

Shadow


[Intro - Em D C B7]

[Verse 1 - Em D C B7 x4]
Is it my fault that I never seemed 
To dazzle quite like you?
Is it my fault that you dropped me
After all that we’d been through? 
Is it my fault in our song of life
You always got the tune?
Is it my fault now? 

[Chorus 1 - Em B C x2 - Em D C Em G D Em]
Living the days 
All my mistakes
In your shadow.
It was my life 
But it felt 
Like yours to borrow.
Sunlight beamed 
Always seemed 
To stream its way past me,
Ignore me.

[Verse 2 - Em D C B7 x4]
You were polished, bright and glossy 
But for me you were a drug.
For years I drank your compliments 
From your favourite poisoned mug.
Screw your courage to the sticking place 
Here lies the runner up,
Never enough.  


[Chorus 2 - Em B C x2 - Em D C Em G D Em]
Living the days 
All my mistakes
In your shadow.
It was my life 
But it felt 
Like yours to borrow.
Sunlight beamed 
Always seemed 
To stream its way past me,
Ignore me.

[Verse 3 - Em D C B7 x4]
Well so much for being friends
Now I see you for what you are -
Always stringing me along 
Tuned me up like your guitar.
But then you’d put me on the shelf 
And you would never see the scars,
Or all the broken parts.

[Chorus 3 - Em B C x2 - Em D C Em G D Em]
Living the days 
All my mistakes
In your shadow.
It was my life 
But it felt 
Like yours to borrow.
Sunlight beamed 
Always seemed 
To stream its way past me,
Ignore me.

[Verse 4 - Em D C B7 x 2 - Em G D C Em]
So it’s time I started moving 
That I took hold of the reins.
And it’s time I lit the spark 
Instead of hiding from the flame.
And it’s time I got the world 
To start calling out my name,
It’s time I broke away.

[Bridge - Em D G - (higher) G C D G - (lower) G D Bm C]
Well I won’t take your rotten fruits of friendship anymore, 
They say stars glow bright in darkness  
But I’m done with feeling small.
You and your games to lose I’m through with you —
I’m  through being ignored.

[Pre-Chorus - (low power chords) C D G C D - G (3rd inversion power)]
I wanna shine (mmm mmm mmm)

[Chorus 4 - G D C x2 - (up octave) G C D G D G]
So I’ll be free
I’ll be free
From your shadow.
It’s my life 
So I’ll live
Like no tomorrow.
And when the daylight spills  (Chords up octave)
The spotlight will be shining over me
I’ll be fre-e-e-e 
To be me.

[Outro - G F#m Em - D G (arpeggio)]
Thanks for the feedback from everyone in comments and reviews. They’ve really helped develop this piece. It’s still far from perfect, but I’m proud of how far I’ve come, and I’m glad that I gave this competition a go :D
Good luck to everyone else entering! 

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7 Comments
  • Nyla

    I really loved this song- it has great rhythm! (and that's from me not knowing music and so not understanding the letters lol) But I really like this- it just flows so nicely- there's awesome rhymes and length of lines. "For years I drank your compliments / From your favourite poisoned mug." was my ultimate favourite line! And the message is so important of course- and the whole story progresses really nicely and just, the lyrics aren't cliche either so it doesn't read as if its repetitive which I really like! Awesome song!


    6 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Re: Yesssss! Never stop singing! And I've never tried Teapig’s Super Berry tea either, but it's going on my bucket list too! (Is it only available in the US?)
    And yesssss you can't go wrong with earl grey! Have you tried any strawberry teas? I am obsessed with their smell more than their taste tho lol.
    Isn't it so intriguing how loose leaf tea tastes so distinctly different than tea bags? I don't know which I prefer; I really like them both.
    Btw, I saw this really cute bear emoji thing online and instantly thought of your lovely username. I get an error when I try to include it in the comment, so I put it at the bottom of my message box so that you can see! XD


    7 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Oh my gosh! This is stunning! I listened to the recording you'd included in one of the previous versions and your voice is beautiful too!
    "Sunlight beamed
    Always seemed
    To stream its way past me,
    Ignore me." - I really really love these lyrics! <3


    7 months ago
  • Lata.B

    I wish you the best of luck with this competition, this is an amazing song!

    Re- Oh goodness thank you for your sweet comment! Wow that means a lot!!

    ALSO I actually wrote more to my story!! I finally got the chance! :)
    If your up for a bit of reading please take a look! Again thank you for your comment! <3
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/206209/version/459885


    7 months ago
  • LadyBug...

    This turned out amazing! Best of luck in the competition!
    Re: your totally welcome for the review. I'm so glad you took it to heart. :)


    7 months ago
  • Parisienne

    re: aww thank you so much and hell yeah I will happily become your big sister lmao. Have a great day :)


    7 months ago
  • Parisienne

    THIS IS DIVINEEE... the line 'But for me you were a drug./For years I drank your compliments /From your favourite poisoned mug.' is honestly sooo perfect. Wow!!! Good luck with the competition, I have a feeling this will do really well! :)


    7 months ago