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This piece is extremely well written (I wish I had this kind of talent). It completely wraps up the life of a writer and the struggles of their craft while also making sure the reader/listener knows that, as much of a pain it can be sometimes, we write because we love it. It is our art, our form of expression, and our escape.
I absolutely adore the first verse. It's very impactful and brings you strait through to the message and meaning of the song.
I don't think so, this piece was perfectly for me.
I love it! Though to be honest, I read it more like a spoken word piece. Have you ever listened to spoken word poetry before? If you haven't (or if you have) I would highly recommend listening to Shayne Koyczan. He has plenty of really great ones, but I know that at least one of them is set to music and has backup vocals and your song would be really cool if it were set up like that. But, it's just my opinion, and it's great either way. Just thought I'd give you something to think about.
Also you said that you would give people reviews if they wanted, and I have this short story that I'm really proud of that I posted a few days ago called The Thought of Freedom, and I was wondering (if you have the time and would like to) if you would review it? I love getting feedback on my work, critiques are basically why I started on this site in the first place. I think you are a very talented writer also. But again, you don't have to if you don't want to. Thanks.