This is one of the first songs I've written so I'd really appreciate some feedback, especially on the following things:
The fourth to last(? ughhhh i counted but forgot just now. and yes, i'm too lazy to go check) stanza thingy feels kinda wordy to me. Is it too wordy? Also the entire song in general, is it too short? Or too long? Could the structure be ordered differently to make it better?
Even just one answer to one of the above questions would be super helpful! Thanks in advance!
Written By: journal.scribbles
February 2, 2021