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christian | violist | nemophilist
est. 10/21/2020

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carbonated adolescence

February 1, 2021

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my ears devour your words, oh they taste like cherry
fresca and leave behind an aftertaste of bittersweet
adolescent change, hold my hand, we've got just four 
years and i want to spend them well, i can feel the
butterflies flap their wings on my cheeks, let's run
barefoot in the park, and as the grass tickles our toes
darling, you say you're mine and I'll say I'm yours
well this word vomit turned out interesting

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9 Comments
  • Yellow Sweater

    I agree with Harzi, this piece is lovely! and I I love the title!


    3 months ago
  • Harzi

    Lovely, lovely, lovely! <3 Surely these lines are gonna be stuck in my head for some time ahh


    3 months ago
  • beth r.

    this title is pure genius!
    "
    my ears devour your words, oh they taste like cherry
    fresca ..."
    beautiful wording and metaphors!
    re: aw thank you :)


    3 months ago
  • remi'sgotinkstains

    this is so enchanting! the line "let's run/barefoot in the park, nd as the grass tickles our toes" really brought the picture of the poem together for me because I LOVE running barefoot in grass so so so so much . . . i also just love going barefoot in general! well done


    3 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    this is so refreshing and new and ahhhh :) i love it


    3 months ago
  • Zirong

    I love the title and the imagery in this piece is stunning! :0


    3 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    beauty
    i love how you described the taste of words


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    re: OMG that's so sweet! I'm glad I helped you in some way, even if I don't know how, lol.


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    Dude, you're getting so good at poetry. I loved these lines especially;

    "my ears devour your words, oh they taste like cherry
    fresca and leave behind an aftertaste of bittersweet
    adolescent change,"

    great job!


    3 months ago