anemoia (#words)

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WtW's resident "the cool cousin you see once a year, but the conversation you guys were having a long time ago picks up where it left off without missing a beat" (says rosi willard)

Child of God
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volleyballer

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Message to Readers

i put all the good stuff in the footnotes.

Southern California (Edited)

January 26, 2021

FREE WRITING

11

[VERSE 1]
The first thing a girl notices about you
Your eyes, ocean eyes that come along
Once every hundred years
There’s somethin’ undeniable about you
Charisma, charisma that can kill
With a few honeyed words

[PRE-CHORUS]
I think you’re just lonely
Aching for something to fill your void
But you put on a bright smile and never slow your roll
Like they do down in Hollywood Hills

[CHORUS]
You’re just like Southern California
A little too much to take in
But take another step, you’re quite intoxicating
Beckoning to join you in the revelry
But you’re everything I never wanted
Altogether glittering in the dark
Like Southern California

[VERSE 2]
I wish I didn’t know these things about you
Your smile, a smile that puts everyone 
At ease, like they’ve always known you
Every girl wants or pities you
For your trail of broken hearts
That you’ve left behind for years

[PRE-CHORUS]
I know you’re just lonely
Aching for something to fill your void
But you put on a bright smile and never slow your roll
Like they do down in Hollywood Hills

[CHORUS]
You’re just like Southern California
A little too much to take in
But take another step, you’re quite intoxicating
Beckoning to join you in the revelry
But you’re everything I never wanted
Altogether glittering in the dark
Like Southern California

[BRIDGE]
The way you live, it hurts my heart
Running from one shiny thing to the next
Leaving the girls who don’t understand you anymore
But they’ll never fill all your empty holes inside
They can’t take all those wrongs and make them right

[VERSE 3]
But all is not lost for you
Hope, there’s hope for change
I believe you’re not too far gone
Redemption arc is just beginning for you
And you’ll move away from the allure of the City
Into a wide open space where you’re finally free

[CHORUS]
You’re just like Southern California
You’ve ceased your striving
Left behind all those ways that were so intoxicating
That still beckon you to revelry
And everything you’ve ever wanted
Altogether shining in the sun
Like Southern California

[OUTRO, SPOKEN]
No hate on SoCal!
Had this idea earlier this month, but I only finished it last week. Came up with it on the fly. It's not the one I'm submitting for the February comp; I'm saving that one because it's special and more polished. 
Based on true experiences, but exaggerated.
I got folklore merch! The "stars around my scars" pullover and the folklore popsocket. :0
Also, I've submitted a few pieces to Elysian Muse Lit Magazine, Ice Lolly Review, and Global Youth Review. Rejected by Ice Lolly :( but they gave me some other great options. Still awaiting word from the other two. The pieces I submitted to Global Youth are ones I'd love to share on here, but haven't because they're photo-based.
Have a fantastic, or at least not-awful, day/evening/afternoon/morning/two a.m. musing time.

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22 Comments
  • Coolgirl2020 (LOVE YA ALL)

    Just reviewed this! ^-^


    3 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    re: i don't think it's true, no - well, perhaps it is for the birds.


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    re: I really..don't know when in the 1800s its set. I wanted to use pieces of history from all over that time period. Feel free to come up with your own theories, 'cause I really don't know, lol


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    RE: barney is a total bab


    3 months ago
  • Shivona

    AH, this is such a good idea! The way you write these lyrics really is beautiful, i would listen to this all day I wanna hear someone sing it so badly!! so lovely
    PS THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THAT AWESOME COMMENT YOU LEFT ON MY PEICE!? I cannot believe I won honetly is SURREALLL thank you sm :)


    3 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    re: sunshine and pop culture!! well earthquakes too :P but 'you know you wouldn't change anything!!'


    3 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    :O Southern California....this piece is just as beautiful and vibrant as the place and just like a Taylor's song, the bridge of ur song is flawless. i'd definitely like to listen to it....on radio....spotify.....youtube!!!!
    re: oops i just realized that now.....'the lakes' and train from 'champagne problems' was intentional tho....but i must try to avoid it XD


    3 months ago
  • almost flora kane

    re: thanks for your comment and i'll keep your pfp in mind for my free time if you give me some things you'd like to include (colors and stuff). i'd just give you my "business" email if that works for you once i make it


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/215066/version/447409


    3 months ago
  • Estera Ulrich-Oltean

    Oh wow, I love this... keep writing!


    3 months ago
  • First Name Last Name

    re: thank you!! my brain is fried too loll and i really like this! this is my first time seeing anyone write a song on wtw so i was pleasantly surprised!!! high key would listen to it


    3 months ago
  • almost flora kane

    re: thank you:) for all of it and when i'm less busy (later this week) i would love to make you a pfp if you want?


    3 months ago
  • almost flora kane

    hohohoho this is good, this is very good. one might even say, absolutely amazing and something that should be produced right now if i knew how to. i would listen to this song. many claps for you:)

    wow my brain is fried sorry for that lol


    3 months ago
  • _Delphiruns2theocean_

    Amazing! As a girl in Southern California I felt like this was speaking to me a bit if that makes sense :) Great job!


    3 months ago
  • Livsnjutare

    This is so GREAT! I loved every part! You're an amazing song writer!
    Also I saw your message box and saw that you were dating dex and i was like yesssssss (dont worry im not dating him XD)! Dex deserves more cover pages though...
    love,
    kitten


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    oh, and also

    Above the Frozen Seas (4):
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/214701/version/446516

    Above the Frozen Seas (3):
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/214634/version/446238

    Above the Frozen Seas (2):

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/214573/version/446077


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    ppssst ok gurl i jammed out to this song in my head


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    AAAAAAAAAAA I LOVE THIS


    3 months ago
  • Lata.B

    Re- Oh goodness I can't wait to jam out to that song in my head haha! You are actually so talented. This is only draft one soo I know you can make it so much better! Also thank you:)


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    re: legit so jealous of uuuuuuuu-


    3 months ago
  • xx carolina xx

    uhhhhh hello new taylor swift when's ur first show??


    3 months ago
  • Lata.B

    THIS IS SO GOOD!! The chorus is just so perfect! There are rhythms in the right places and not too much or too little.


    3 months ago