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Okay, I thought it was a really interesting concept; a family huddling together in what I can only assume is a bunker, waiting out a natural disaster. It was a nicely put together piece for the most part.
Who is this character? Why has the world gone into such disarray over an asteroid? How big is it? Why is India underwater? How long has the protagonist within the story been stuck in this bunker/basement with their family. I think what you really need to hone in on in this piece is fleshing out the world around your main character, as well as also giving the reader little tidbits about the main character that would give them insight into what sort of person they are. Arguably, world-building comes first in this case; a post-apocalyptic/dystopian piece should have a well-thought out environment that the characters can interact with.
I think this is a really good starting point for a story that has a lot of potential; the only real pointers that I think you should focus on are:
- worldbuilding; how does this setting the story takes place in function?
-your characters' lens (figure out how exactly they view the world around them and what their thoughts are)
-family dynamic (it's interesting - work on how they interact with each other. A cool contrast would be a monologue showing the reader what the family was like before the crisis, versus after.
I hoped this review helped you in some way!
Can't wait to see how it pans out!