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Message to Readers
Hi guys! I am working on a new series called "Magnum". If you want to get notified when I post a new chapter, just say "Me!" in the comment section. I will be posting the first chapter on Wednesday. Thanks and enjoy the series! :)
It's gonna be a total sitting-on-the-edge-of-your-seat story, which I love! You already get a taste of this in the trailer. The grammar isn't perfect, but it makes up for it in excitement! I'm a little nervous about asteroids now! ;)
Considering this is a trailer, I don't really need to know more. I like the amount of info vs mystery in this piece. You aren't confused about what's happening, but it doesn't spoil any details for the actual series. That can be a hard balance, but you've done it perfectly! More details would be nice, but honestly, I just love descriptive writing so that could just be me :P But, do remember, descriptions can really pull readers into the writing, so a little description never hurt no one ;P
Great job! My main point for you is your grammar.
After you've written a piece, I suggest re-reading (aloud would be best) it to make sure it flows off the tongue. If your writing isn't easy to read, it's going to take your readers out of the picture you're painting for them.
Wonderful piece! I can't wait to read the series :D Remember, these are all suggestions, and I did point out a lot of things; that doesn't mean I don't love this!
Keep Writing <3