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Est. August 2020

"It's not use going back to yesterday, because I was a different person then." -Lewis Carroll

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I read a poem with an extended metaphor a few days ago, and I wanted to try it out for myself. Let me know if it works!

i am a stone

January 24, 2021

Write a poem that incorporates three words—one that your friend would use to describe you, one a family member would use to describe you, and one YOU would use to describe you (by Lady Secretive)


i am a stone 
being sculpted by the world around me. 

hard times have eroded me. 
the wind has tried to 
wear me down, 
harsh waters have crashed into me, 
trying to smooth the edges 
that i've took so long to chisel and perfect. 

i am defined by the other stones around me,
the ones that say i'm kind
when we laugh together.

i am defined by the stones that are a part of me,
the ones that i am separated from by only a small crack,
and they say i am creative.

but mostly, i am defined by the stone that i am.
i am defined by myself. 

i am unformed,
because i am still a work-in-progress, 
still trying to smooth my razor-sharp edges,
and come up with my own designs that i can carve.

i am
still 
a stone
being sculpted by the world around me. 
Kind- how a friend described me
Creative- how a family member described me
Unformed- how I described myself. 

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8 Comments
  • real_Lyra-D

    Really creative and I love it.


    8 months ago
  • astrea

    wow


    8 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Oh wow this is so beautiful! "Unformed" is such an amazing pick! It seems to hint that you constantly believe that you're able to grow and that's wonderful! <3
    Re: Thank you so much for you lovely comment on my piece!


    8 months ago
  • Livsnjutare

    I love this! I love the 3 words you chose, and how you made them flow perfectly together in this amazing poem! Great job!
    re: Thank you!
    love,
    kitten


    8 months ago
  • Zirong

    Ooo this poem is so interesting :)


    8 months ago
  • FOXLOVER#1

    You did a great job on this!


    8 months ago
  • journal.scribbles

    I love the word with which you chose to describe yourself and how the poem's ending circled back to its beginning. You do seem kind, creative, and, based on this poem's description of you, unformed. Amazing job with this prompt!!
    re: thank you!!! that means a lot to me!


    8 months ago
  • U S E R N A M E S (W R IT I NG HIA T US)

    Very creative, unique, and profound.
    I think my favorite part is probably this stanza:

    "I am unformed,
    because I am still a work-in-progress,
    still trying to smooth my razor-sharp edges,
    and come up with my own designs that I can carve."


    8 months ago