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Aspiring author from the U.S.
I'm 16 years old
I hope to publish my own novels, novellas, and manga one day.
Mostly on here to receive feedback on how well I'm doing in my writing journey! :)
INTP-T (Turbulent Logician)

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If things are looking bleak, just know that it won't always be this way.
Things are going to get better for you, trust me. :)
Continue to write, love others, and BE a blessing to others because we all need it right now.
I'll keep you in my prayers.
God bless you and have a good day. :>

I believe all people are created equal and are irrevocably loved by God with a perfect love called 'AGAPE' which means he gives up things for us and continues to love us, although we don't always do the same. So please, be respectful of others' beliefs, cultures, and ethnicity in the chat/comments and in real life because we are all loved for and cared for by the same Agape. With love ~ USERNAMES

Forever in my Mind

January 22, 2021

Forever in my mind, only you. 
The pieces of my mind go away with you.
Even if I tried to shake it, 
I can't, it's impossible to do.
I see you in all the pieces in my life
Though you weren’t mine, you were my first love.
I wanted to run away with you 
(but you disappeared and left my troubles here.)

Its’ not working, I’m denying the feelings of my mind
The feelings of change
My head is tight from just trying to hide my views
But if there’s one thing I’m certain of, its’ you.
I’m so stuck on you.
I want you back.

I don’t know what to make of today 
If I’m doing everything right, 
Why do my bones ache?

(I wanna know if you’re ok, 
that you’re thinking of me.)
I don’t know if I’m worth it, 
But I really need to call you tonight.
I know that I felt with you and 
maybe we were perfect(?) 
I don’t know if I’m worth it
Feeling like I did something wrong
(But I really need some closure tonight.)

Your cities are  made of marble floors
I’ve been to the same cities 200 fold, 
Walking in the same direction
Not knowing where I am.
If I could break past your walls, one of us could have a heart attack, 
and m
y heart would be still once more.
You are, "The deepest shade of jaded." 
(In the end, you'll always be the best thing I've ever known.)

  • a piece using only lyrics from songs (don't forget to credit each song and songwriter in the footnotes) (by lemonnsharkk)
  • Yuna Lullabies
  • Caught up Teskey Brothers
  • Yuna Mannequin
  • Yuna Mountains
  • Yuna I want you back 
  • Vallis Alps Young 
The slow descent into madness of a lover with an unrequited love.


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  • Lata.B

    Re- AHHH THAT IS THE SWEETEST THING!! Aw your comment made me smile! Thank you so so so so so much! You don't know how much that means! I love to hear people care about my story!!
    Yeah also I totally understand!

    26 days ago
  • Rachaelgrace (hiatus) :)

    thank you for the follow :)

    about 1 month ago
  • Rachaelgrace (hiatus) :)

    this is really well done. great metaphors!

    about 1 month ago
  • useless :)

    this is beautifully written! :)

    about 1 month ago
  • Lata.B

    Re- Haha glad it made you smile, I had to add a bit of humor!! You're the sweetest! I will be sure to do that! Lots of love <3

    about 1 month ago
  • Lata.B

    Hii, I wrote like ALOT more and would love some feedback!!!
    Have a wonderful day!

    about 1 month ago
  • Writing4Life

    Re: Tysm! I appreciate the comment :D Question, do you mind if I ask what religion you do (or don't) have?

    about 1 month ago
  • FastOceanLove

    Re: Thank you hopefully I'll write more of those types of messages and having experienced this sadly a couple times firsthand made me feel a little more confident after writing it and hopefully for you and others as well!

    about 1 month ago
  • AJ - Izzy

    My heart is just, ah, I love how wonderfully you've captured all these precious emotions. Your footnote as well... "The slow descent into madness of a lover with an unrequited love"... a dance disguised as a sentence. Beautiful beautiful writing <3

    about 1 month ago
  • Emi

    This is so beautiful and romantic. It feels very real and I can really connect with it. Beautiful work! Very well crafted from the lyrics.

    about 1 month ago
  • FastOceanLove

    This is beautiful! I'd love for u to check out my pieces, I'm kinda new too, maybe Alley Anonymous, I'm Not Your Prize, and/or my newest series ESP Research Agency? Everyone else feel free as well!

    about 1 month ago