acrosstheuniverse28

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Est. March 2020

Message to Readers

Per usual, alternate title suggestions are GREATLY appreciated! I probably went through 10+ different options before landing on the extremely unoriginal idea of "Legacy"... and I'm still not really happy with that. So please, all of you poetic people out there, any ideas/suggestions would be great <3

Legacy

February 6, 2021

FREE WRITING

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brief mentions of blood, some violence



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you wanted your name
    uttered far and wide
carved into stone
    on every street side

you wanted your deeds
    in murals remembered
with fresh crimson blood
    dripping, hotter than embers

you wanted a legacy
    you wanted it now
so desperate a desire
    you didn't care how

a shadow of anguish
    nothing but hate left behind
to others' suffering
    you were happily blind

so keen to ensure
    the world remembered you
holding a knife to each throat
    so your message got through

indeed, a legacy
    is what you have made
out of another's pain
    a grotesque trade

but you got your mural
    your name carved in stone
i have just one question,
    now that you're done:

is this what you wanted?
    a legacy of fear?
because it will certainly last
    that much is clear

they will remember you
   
    your name and your face

for once history is written
   
    it cannot be erased




 
This got a bit dark... hope you enjoy?

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5 Comments
  • Nyla

    Wow! This is so amazing! The rhymes work so incredibly well and don't take away from the story at all which is what I always struggle with when rhyming! This is so deep and I love it- and also it may be a tiny bit dark but it is so true and definitely need to be said! The last line is just so incredibly powerful! RE: Awww, thank you so much!! You're so sweet!! :))


    6 months ago
  • Starting Anew! (still Coolgirl though)

    Replying: Aww, that's nice! I'm doing great, thanks! I'll review something as soon as possible! <3


    7 months ago
  • Starting Anew! (still Coolgirl though)

    Hi! How have you been? It's been so long!
    I'd love to review three or more of your pieces! Will you tell me which ones you'd like reviewed? Thank you! <3


    7 months ago
  • Rachaelgrace

    whoops i meant lust after power lol


    7 months ago
  • Rachaelgrace

    this is really well done. i love the emotion and reminder not to list after power. wonderful job!


    7 months ago