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Just the title, 'eve', I thought of evening or the Christian mother of humanity.
For the first paragraph, to keep the delicate tone, how about you say "I will complete my metamorphosis however many times I need to ensure human." or "I will travel my metamorphosis however many times I need to ensure I am complete." Metamorphosis isn't just once, it is a grand journey to anyone and everyone. In the last stanza, I love the imagery, I love how I can see you so clearly working out the moves of the moment. It's lovely. This is lovely.
This is a leisurely slow read, I wanted to savour it because it was so nice, and so warm. When I reached the end, I truly wasn't ready to leave.