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I like this piece because rather than attempting to prove the existence of God, which is both impossible and very difficult to have a decent attempt at, and because the Bible, Christianity and religion as a whole is very open to interpretation, it looks at what the word 'God' means to the writer. This piece has then, perhaps a inadvertently proved the existence of God, or a version of him (him? Is god a he?). Presuming that love is indeed real and not a myth spread by the human race (unlikely), then god is everywhere that love is.
This piece, I think, could become quite an interesting piece if you continued to explore the theory of 'God' being a metaphor for love and other human traits, such as kindness, compassion and empathy, that encourage us to do good and to 'do unto others as you would have them do unto you.'
I think this is a great piece of writing, and you should go somewhere with it. Or not. *hides behind book* Anyways, go get 'em, tiger!