Peer Review by smpp (Turkey)

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an ode to the stars i stole from the sky

By: Cosmogyral


FREE WRITING

THIS IS A COLLECTION OF POEMS UNDER A SINGLE TITLE



LXXVII. think not of your brevity,
for no attachment means the lack of earth that can restrict you.
           so chase the stars as if they weren't lightyears away,
chase the stars as if gravity never hurt you.



What did you think when you read that? What did you feel? Even if it was the most unintelligible scene or incomprehensible nonsense, tell me, please. I'd like to know.

this hok, the means of answering adventure.

Peer Review

It is brief but has lots of emotions and meanings in it. I like the thing you said "as if gravity never hurt you." It's very pretty.


I think the briefness makes the effect of this piece, so I don't think there's something you need to add. It's beautiful in this way.


Reviewer Comments

For the answer to your question, it made me feel lost. I don't why actually, this piece suppose to give me hope. But I think it is because I realized my dreams (the stars I chase) are lightyears away and I won't be able to reach them. But don't think this is a bad comment. I love your writing!! It was well-written; keep going:)