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Message from Writer

Because I could not stop for Death –
He kindly stopped for me –
The Carriage held but just Ourselves –
And Immortality.
-Because I could not stop for Death by Emily Dickinson

Currently Reading: Loveless by Alice Oseman

"Forever is composed of nows." -Emily Dickinson

Slipping

December 29, 2020

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Flaming flickers through the time
      We could be 
               Should be
   Deep sublime
           Word all jumble
                            Buildings
                            crumble
    What did you expect when you heard that rumble?
                                                              Help is on the way
                                                              Help is here
But
Look out!
Help has just as much to fear
                When Help is crying 
                Help is dying
                The laws of Help
                Help is defying
Safety says it looks over you
Safety is lying
                                                                         When the dropping rain begins to thrum
                                                                                 The world begins to slip into slum
                                                                                         I'm giving up
                                                                                             I'm giving in
                                                                                                  Take me;
                                                                                                        I'm ready to succumb-

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4 Comments
  • BlueWolf (Semi Hiatus)

    The rhyming is just masterful. I think the formatting is really cool. The concept is also great. I adore this piece. Awesome message box. Congrats on publishing your first piece!!! :)


    9 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Woah! The ending is so powerful! And the formatting just makes it more and more enticing. You've played with rhymes so perfectly that it's music to my ears! Great work and welcome to WtW! Can't wait to read more of your work! :)


    9 months ago
  • ~madeline~

    Wow! This is really interesting! I love the formatting so much!
    Welcome to Write the World! I'm Madeline... I write :) If you have any questions feel free to comment on one of my pieces and I'll do what I can to help. Here's a piece you can go to to give you some tips... https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/206176/version/423779
    Hope you have a great time here!!


    9 months ago
  • Emi

    The formatting of this piece is quite clever. The ending too...pretty good.
    Also, welcome to Write the World!


    9 months ago