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"I can imagine someone laying on the ground with blurred vision and helpless as the person is looking over them." This doesn't "move me," but it definitely set the settling very quickly. Or the image. It doesn't take long stanzas to establish a setting.
The current end itself is amazing and it's enough to just keep it there and let our imagination wander. Sometimes letting their imagination do it makes it better and more intense than saying. I can feel the bloodshed but nothing is more jarring than sudden contrast and sweetness. That way, not only do you make it heavier and more "personal" for the reader, but it also will make the revenge out any way you want. Contrasting it with another and depending on your tone will give you a medium of which sort of revenge this is other than free-flow bloodspree and hatred and adrenaline. We don't exactly understand the relationship between the two; only that it's enough for the narrator it kill and feed pieces to vultures. In all, you don't have one implement this.
There is nothing I can tell you to get rid of, only add. Whether you extend this or not, save the vulture's feast to the imagination lol. But this sounds like tragedy.m