Coeur

United States

girl who likes flowering trees and cats.
biopic drawn for me by my dear friend "bogsoup"

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"Friendship is unnecessary, like philosophy, like art... It has no survival value; rather it is one of those things that give value to survival."
C. S. Lewis

Hand Splayed In Starlight

December 8, 2020

FREE WRITING

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Hold it up and
splay branches out,
Let stars bleed through
the cracks.

Color impossible to make out in
this absence of sun,
Let imagination color
inside the veins.

Squint at the little white flecks
dotting around your fingers,
What if they were birthmarks?
What if you had moles of shining silver?

Clench into a fist
stick it into your pocket,
it's cold
so cold.

Turn your back on the stars and
head to purring heaters.
Later, huddled under blankets,
Hold up your hand and--

Remember the stars.


 

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6 Comments
  • useless :)

    re: not a problem haha! on the contrary, i kinda need all the info i can get about different writing techniques and stuff so you rlly helped! :)


    3 months ago
  • useless :)

    re: oh, then that's what i was going for!! also, thank you so much for explaining it :)


    3 months ago
  • useless :)

    re: thank you! :)
    i was going for thoughts that pass through someone's head at the moment, i'm not exactly sure what stream of consciousness is since i'm pretty new to writing, could you explain that?
    also, this is beautiful and the imagery is gorgeous :)


    3 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    this imagery. i wanna breathe it in.
    re: absolutely. love is def oversimplified. we use the same word to describe a new car as our favorite meal as talking to our pets as to our parents as to our friends as to our significant others/spouses. i know it's all context, but it might be nice to have, yes, more words. yes, the greeks were fascinating. and the romans. and the egyptians. and the scandinavians. and the chinese. it seems like all the ancient cultures have soooo much to teach us.
    oh, that sucks, i bet it would have been fantastic to get feedback on that essay. are you, like me, one of the writers who also kind of likes writing essays and nonfiction?


    5 months ago
  • Emily Jasmine

    This is beautiful


    5 months ago
  • Tayyaba

    Amazinggg<33


    5 months ago