Stone of Jade

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Message to Readers

hi there! this was inspired by beth r's piece (footnotes). "I'm coming" was the last text i sent --it was a work relate thing and not sentiment at all lol--i kinda turned it into a mix of prose/poetry.

I wanted to try and tell a story where the tone of a simple phrase changes, portraying growing up and moving on.

this was not my first idea for this prompt (see link below), but as i was writing the first idea, this one came to mind and i wanted to try it out. hope you liked it!

https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/205935/version/423234

link to first idea^^

time changes tone | inspired by beth r. (footnotes)

December 1, 2020

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the laughter of the children rang through the playground,
shrieks of joy filled the air.
the boy...
bright eyed,
shaggy brown hair,
blue puffy coat,
orange gloves.
the girl...
laughing smile,
golden hair,
red jacket,
brown boots.

the playmates were a colorful picture.
they chased each other over the wood chip covered ground,
up the ladder,
down the slide.
"to the treasure!" the boy cried.
"I'm coming! I'm coming!" the girl laughed.

years later, the colorful picture changed.
it is now a picture of happiness. 
the playmates are older now,
best friends.
the boy is nervous,
his cheeks blush red.
"are you going to the dance?" the boy asks.
"with you? I'm definitely coming," the girl teased.

the happy picture turns tranquil.
the blissful pair lay under a tree,
sharing dreams,
sharing hopes. 
they plan their future.
the boy turns to the girl,
"will you be at the graduation?" he suggests.
"of course I'm coming," the girl says contentedly.

the picture is now torn in two,
separated in different albums.
the girl watches from a distance,
as the boy sits with another girl.
they remain friends,
never forgetting what they used to be.
"the wedding is on Saturday," the boy mentions.
"I'm coming," the girl whispers. 
 
this is inspired by beth r.'s prompt:
 "turn the last text you wrote into a story/poem"

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19 Comments
  • Figwit

    This is so sad! I love it so much! :'(
    Re: Thanks for the comment! I'm supposed to be studying for my Latin exam, but I really don't want to so I just wrote that instead, lol. Kind of a melancholy day for me... Not sure why. ;)


    5 months ago
  • Lata.B

    omg awww you broke my heart and I LOVE IT!


    5 months ago
  • doodleninja

    hello again!! Here to announce there's a BONUS episode of Stereo Tropes Co. now out! :D


    5 months ago
  • bookmagic

    Re- thank you so much. That's very sweet of you. And also thank you for being so supportive of a stranger.


    5 months ago
  • rwong

    oh. my. gosh. this is beautifullll but also heartbreaking but i cant go cry cause im in class right now whyyyyy did you do this to meee??


    5 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    ahhhhhhhh this is too gorgeous and sad and ahhhhhhhhh now i need to go sob :n:


    5 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    Ahhh no you are breaking me that was so sweet and heart wrenching.


    5 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    re: Woah! Really?! You sound so pretty!! I kinda look like my pfp, but I recently cut my hair, so it's about shoulder length rather than mid back now. I've got brown hair on the darker side with natural red highlights that look blonde in some lighting. Right now my eyes are kind of grey, but they're really hazel. Change between blue/grey/brown/green, depending on the weather and what I'm wearing. I can't say anything about the smile, tho xD I wouldn't know.


    5 months ago
  • In Which Yaya Writes

    Heyo! The second part of The Newbie and the Maze is out! https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/205102/version/423468
    I don’t have time right now to read yours *sighs*. I’m sorry! And then me giving you this is super hypocritical... Ugh.


    5 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Wow, I love this!


    5 months ago
  • ~Zoe N~

    re: yep... I wrote it at 2 in the morning in the middle of a mental breakdown so yeah lol


    5 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    Re: OOoo. Hm... I kinda imagine you with like... light brown hair, and warm brown eyes that can pierce the soul when you're mad. You're not tan, but not too pale. You've got a nice rounded nose that fits perfectly onto your face. I don't know, just my thoughts xD


    5 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender

    WAHHHHH!!! *swipes at waterfall of tears* OH MY POOR LITTLE HEARTTTTTT!!! Whyyyyyyy?!??? This is absolutely, just......... I’m speechless for a word to accurately describe it. Just wow.


    5 months ago
  • AstroWriter

    Awwww. Me sad. Me happy for writer. Me good.


    5 months ago
  • beth r.

    this is beautiful and i'm overtired and crying


    5 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    You sound. Just like. I imagined. You would. OoO Woah


    5 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    Awwww. No!!! Dude, you had a gem you just missed *angry lemon face*

    Re: 0o0 really???????


    5 months ago
  • doodleninja

    oh my gosh who gave you the right to tear my heart into two THIS IS NOT OKAY XD
    this is beautiful! I am a sucker for stories like these and the way you repeat the phrase "I'm coming" and give it a different meaning each time...it's so good. Time indeed changes tone <3 <3


    5 months ago
  • Busssy.Beee

    YESSS, THIS ONE IS SO HEARTBREAKING. but it was beautifully written and definitely well thought out. I love it!! <3333


    5 months ago