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The simile "red as paprika" was really creative and poignant. The fact that Phoebe is an elderly texter is humourous to me.
You did well in terms of balancing description, scenes and explanations.
Maybe instead of "God I hate that feeling," you could show that the events of the year changed your perspective on your own vulnerability? So "God, I hate that feeling, yet needed it." Of course, that only works if you actually thought such a thing.
This is your life. Your year. It was a race run with two sprained ankles, but your story is one that should be heard.
I think my comments are scattered all over the piece itself. Hope you win, bro.