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I would be so grateful if you guys could review this. I would even do review for review. If so, please leave a link to your piece in the comments. Much love. <3
I thoroughly appreciated the essence of this piece; the overwhelming anxiety of worrying, not only about yourself, but the wellbeing of those you love, especially if one of them is a healthcare worker in the thick of a pandemic.
This stort was beautifully written. The sole part I would elaborate more on is the concluding paragraphs. A suggestion, if I may, is to throw poetic prose into the ending. Make sentences short. Dramatic. Daunting. Show, don't tell.
As I mentioned before, the essence of the piece was spectacular, but I personally would like a bigger climax.
You are an amazing writer! You describe scenes and emotions with such honesty, withholding nothing. Which makes the reader immediately drawn to the protagonist. Their 'voice' is so relatable and non intimidating. Bravo, my friend!
Please take note that everything I have written is based completely on my personal opinions. I could be wrong. I could be right. The truth is, it all depends on your preference because this is your personal story. Continue writing! Continue persevering! I do not doubt your talent and capabilities.