birthdaycandles

Ireland

Just an 18 yr old aspiring to be something like a living, walking (and writing) hug.
...also...
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Musician
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Older sister to @happygiggles
-Joined Sept 2019-

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Ah, the great romances of the teenage mind.

November 24, 2020

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I took turn
As I caught him smiling.
I blushed like lilies in spring.
Looking again, his smile more beguiling.
Before I took notice
I was walking his way.
No no no! my mind yelled
Begging my feet to stay.

Hello's were exchanged,
As they often are.
The conversation flowed;
But didn't get very far.
He looked in my eyes and said;
"I have to catch my train."
And if we had spoken a moment more,
I might not have felt this pain.

I remember him at night
And think, "Oh what a shame"
For the first boy that ever smiled at me,
I never got his name.
 
True tragic story.

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14 Comments
  • Fabiana250

    This is really nice, I enjoyed reading it! I love the first verse <3


    3 months ago
  • anonymous_123

    I feel the main character here. That’s sometimes how I feel! Good job writing! That sounds a little bit kiddish but really!


    3 months ago
  • anonymous_123

    Re- aww that you


    3 months ago
  • SunV

    Hey Birthdaycandles!! I wanted to thank you, for everything.

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/204853/version/421014


    3 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Awww this is so sad yet sweet. I'll be wishing for you to meet him again!!!!


    3 months ago
  • midnight.summerrose

    This is amazing!!! Wow!! :)


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Re: OH MY GOSH GOOD LUCK

    also goodnight


    3 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender

    Re: yes, I think we all need some extra kindness these days. Thank you again! And haha, I’d love for you to read whatever I finally publish! XD I think my problem is that I write lyrics and then don’t like them, so..... but I’m working on it! And that’d be great if they have a competition!
    AW, THAT IS GREAT! You’ll do amazing! Public speaking is really intimidating, I know! But you’ll be great! And I hope you have a good night’s sleep too; that will make you feel better about it! Just stay calm and be you! You’re awesome! Night, B. C!!!


    3 months ago
  • Emmy Lou

    Well written.


    3 months ago
  • beth r.

    me. i love this so much
    re: lol thank you!!


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Noooo this is so gorgeous and why can't it have become a "and that kids is how I met your father" story


    3 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender

    Re: Thanks you about the piece! I agree with you!
    And about the check in:
    AWWW! Thank you, B.C., for making my night! It means a lot that you came to check on me! :) I’m doing pretty well, thank you! I’ve been trying to write a song, but I think I’m gonna go write a poem now instead. How are you?


    3 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Re: Thank you on all accounts!
    And yay. Yayayayayay.


    3 months ago
  • Rohan’s Defender

    Wow, this is so beautiful and skillfully written! I. LOVE. It!


    3 months ago