Wisp

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i still dream of you

est. 26.9.19

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there were constellations in your eyes;
those downtrodden lifeless eyes held shooting stars
and i watched them fly across gray irises
bursting into light never before seen
and how could i not be enchanted?

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Ἀχιλλεύς

November 23, 2020

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youth is strewn across the room,
pieces and parts haphazardly thrown around, 
and when she looks for them, it seems she gets older, 
with every passing moment of longing and venturing. 
how was she not to treasure the thing she had beheld? 
and when she's crying over the lost of something dear, 
she calls to God, who turns blind eyes to sinners, 
and she is a sinner now. and now she calls for love 
from the demons below, calling and calling towards 
the fallen angel, and that is her God now. 
he flies upon the wings of Icarus, feathers and wax 
melting into his skin as he glides above the clouds, 
tasting frothy forgiveness against his cold cheeks. 
but that is until his wings give out, because materialistic 
things fall apart, and deep down he knows his wings 
aren't the only things made from materialistic fantasies.
spiraling down he plummets, the earth swallowing him whole,
and even the wings of Icarus cannot save him from his fate, 
as the wax and feathers bleed in vain; of dusty truths and 
hidden beginnings. and he falls, swallowed into nonexistence. 
clinging to the fragmented truth, they withheld the realities, 
calling to Dionysus for that last taste of ecstasy. because who 
would want to die by the hands of Titans, and they know they 
will not survive, and their efforts are in vain, but the taste of 
dripping wine from eternal yearning springs to mind, and 
Dionysus appears. torn apart are they, heart of jaded longings 
buried into the depths of forever ago, and was that taste 
of ecstasy worth it? was it worth dying in nevermore? 
the river Styx covers it, blessing it with the shield of 
eternal suffering, and it is drowned in the Underworld, 
swallowing the griefs of the dead and the lives of the dying, 
it feels the way it burns their esophagus, the way it feels like 
screaming and clawing at the thin layer of being in its throat, 
it tastes the fiery bile of grief and the willingness to throw everything 
away for another day to live, and it sheds tears in solace, 
droplets of grievances dipped into pools of grasping hands, 
and it is eroded away in the depths of the Styx, its being forsaken 
in the hands of eternal suffering and longing for another day. 
and decorate your hands upon the grace of Olympus, dipping 
your fingertips in the dying facade of bliss and dreams come true, 
oh Achilles, it is no wonder you have bestowed upon us the only 
part of you that had not been protected and guarded, for if we 
were to become Gods, we would fall into the depths of madness, 
and forsake ourselves against the mirage of vanity.
Inspired by Gang of Youths' Achilles, Come Down

Credit to crystalline•galaxies for getting the song stuck in my head now. (Go bug them about it ;) and while you're at it, read their glorious pieces as well!) 

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9 Comments
  • crystalline•galaxies

    okay, i'm back to continue the gushing.
    the title of this piece! it means "achilles," right? that's such a cool little thing because the actual name "achilles" isn't mentioned until later in the piece, and that kind of ties it all together. is the whole entire piece about achilles? is the narrator talking to that character? that's the way i read it the last time i looked at it, but it changes every time. it's so cool because it ties all these different references in in different ways and the interpretation can change based on the section you look at. "oh Achilles, it is no wonder you have bestowed upon us the only/part of you that had not been protected and guarded, for if we/were to become Gods, we would fall into the depths of madness,/and forsake ourselves against the mirage of vanity." this section absolutely stole my breath out of my lungs and gutted me all in one swoop. i keep reading it again and again and every time i find something new in it, something that leaves a resonance inside of my head. the whole entire piece is like that, actually. when you first read it, it falls over your body like a waterfall, and then every time you read it after that, it's more of a sucker-punch feel (in a lovely way, of course). it's just -- ah!
    and thank you for the low-key shoutout... i swear, if i wasn't crying by the time i finished the piece, i definitely shed a tear there.

    (i'm also super glad that you like "achilles come down." *cackling*)


    5 months ago
  • crystalline•galaxies

    oh my actual goodness, how did i not see this before?? i’m so mad at myself! and you even named me in the footnotes... wisp, i’m so glad i’m wearing a mask right now because i’m sitting in math class grinning like a downright idiot.
    this piece. oh my word, this piece. as i was reading through, i came across the first icarus line and got really excited because greek mythology and then i read the rest of the piece and almost went feral. it’s so gorgeous and haunting and beautiful and you’re basically a god yourself. the line with achilles especially made me super exciting because i think my life revolves around him now — and you wove him in perfectly. i keep going back over this again and again. i’m sorry that i can’t gush over this piece for longer but i’m in the middle of class and i’m not supposed to be on my phone right not. take care, and i apologize for not seeing this sooner!


    5 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    "and was that taste / of ecstasy worth it? was it worth dying in nevermore?" this entire piece is absolutely beautiful; it was so hard to choose a favorite line! i loved each and every word. the imagery is so striking, the word choice is so, SO powerful... i really love this <333 wow...


    5 months ago
  • Maya'sTired

    Love that song and I can feel how you drew from it here. This piece feels like epic poetry, to me. It doesn't just flow, it cascades.


    5 months ago
  • Starflower

    Wow, this piece is beautiful! Your rich imagery is magnificent, and I love the way you incorporated the Greek legends into it so seamlessly. The ending gave me chills. Also, congrats on the 103 followers!!! You deserve it so much. And thank you for your kind words on my piece, I really appreciate it. I'm doing well, and I really hope you're okay, too! <3


    5 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Re: *emotional overload* Thank you so much!!


    6 months ago
  • rwong

    omygosh this is absolutely amazing!! <3 is it weird that i wanna write like you? cause i do <3 <3 <3


    6 months ago
  • everythingbagel (the cliffhanger goddess)

    you just got your 100th followers.
    i'm totally in awe of this piece.


    6 months ago
  • BlueWolf (Semi Hiatus)

    Beautiful!!!! I enjoyed this so much, it was just gorgeous!!! Amazing job!


    6 months ago