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I love the aura of mystery you've created around this family, and how this novel excerpt hints at a dark, fantasy world. The dialogue really captured the essence of Ruthanna's family, and your descriptions were highly vivid. I also loved how the title - "Ruthless" - corresponds with the name of the main character, Ruthanna. Super creative, and the cliffhanger at the end definitely makes me want to read on!
This excerpt takes a great snapshot of Ruthanna's personality - she's caring towards her little brother, she's accustomed to helping her father hunt, and she's curious about the world around her.
Honestly, I don't think any scenes need to be expanded here - you transition between each section of the excerpt really well, and I love how you used dialogue to sneak in information about Ruthanna and her family.
The setting in this excerpt was fantastic - a house in the snowy woods, hidden away from the world, and I'd love if you could explore it a little more. I understand the word limit, and your focus on the characters, but some additional descriptions of scenery will go a long way towards grounding and connecting the characters to their surroundings. For instance, when Ruthanna converses with her father in the woods, or when she catches crickets for her brother, it would be awesome if you could extend a little detail to her surroundings. How do the trees look like? Gnarled, dusted with snow? The ground? Soaked with deer's blood, bright against the frosted grass? The blackberry bushes - lush, dark green, patterned with snowflakes? As you add descriptions as these, feel free to sneak in background information about Ruthanna, her family, and the world they live in.
Throughout this excerpt, you hint at bits of an awesome world (i.e. Vichrayo, a King, possible religion - Lady), and your writing is amazing at that. I absolutely loved this excerpt, and after finishing it for the first time, I was actually a little disappointed - I wanted to read on! Keep writing this stunning novel!!
If you have any questions, just reach out to me, and I'll be happy to help! <3