poetgoneonpluto

India

Nandini Rabindra Maharana
India
[she/her]
breathing words and crying sentences

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Hi all!
I would love to receive your feedback on my pieces and would love to read and review your pieces too.
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huffledor always <3
joined: 16/11/2020

eighteenth

November 16, 2020

FREE WRITING

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e i g h t e e n t h

     there was a careful pause between each letter,
     they told me to handle this year with absolute care
     for i would be living a new life, a life i am scared to start.
 
as roses won't be the reason for my delight anymore,
it would be the thing i would regret giving to my ex-lover.
i would cry, 
more often than i laugh.

     i had always waited for the year when parents say,
     you are old enough to get a free pass of freedom
     and the deadline of getting back home has been
     extended from 8 to 8.30 p.m. 
     
the gradual shift from frolic laughter to frequent frowns,
the shift from random hangouts to serious work,
the shift from tiny teens to awful adulting 
will i be able to h a n d l e it?

     of course (not)? my brain has muddled up memories,
     thirteen to seventeen was a roller-coaster ride,
     stuff that wasn't right, and a long chain of doubts tied
     me to the pillar of anxiety. i don't want gifts which
     make me feel guilty about making rash decisions.

maybe i want to restart,
e i g h t e e n t h,
a transition between teenage years
and adulthood where adultery is
the key to survival//
Hey, how're you all? 
I wrote this poem while my online class thought of posting over here. It seems a bit vague, peer reviews would help a lot!

P.S. Also thank you all for those warm welcome wishes yesterday, ya'll are so sweet :) 

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6 Comments
  • Sanjana Sunilkumar

    OMG! I love your username so much!


    6 months ago
  • SunV

    Re: I'm a four, with a five wing. You can find your type! truity[dot]com has an accurate test. It's slightly long, but really accurate, and so worth it!

    A wing is based on your predominant type. If you were a three, your wing is either two or four, based on which one has a higher percentage.


    6 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    YOUR INSTA AND YOUR BLOG ARE BEAUTIFUL, AESTHETIC AND JUST *sighs in appreciation*


    6 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    Hey! I see SunV, that wonderful girl, has already welcomed you, but welcome again!
    Also, this poem was beautiful and haunting! I think you captured the anticipation and nervousness and all the emotions with striking descriptions. Can't wait for more of your work!


    6 months ago
  • SunV

    Re: Well, yeah, that is how we mostly talk. Some writers (Not me) are also on another site, called prose, but don't know how that works, because I'm not on it.


    6 months ago
  • SunV

    Hi Nandini! This is really amazing! I love your writing!

    I'm not on Insta, so I'll introduce myself here: I'm SunV! Welcome to WtW! Feel free to reach out to me if you have any questions, I'll answer them in a heartbeat! I can't wait to see more of your amazing work!


    6 months ago