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Project Crane (Working Title) Prologue

By: Devan Belleau


FREE WRITING

​Defeat was inevitable
But they were standing there
To the bitter end
Their hearts beating 
All in the rhythm of a pendulum
And as the horn blared
They raised their shields 
And with little hope they fought 
But in the end
Defeat was inevitable 

A NOTE FROM THE AUTHOR 
hey there reader!!! this is the prologue for my new story! I hope you like it! i will be posting more chapters in the story later. feel free to give any feedback you would like! it is greatly appreciated. hope to hear from you all soon! 

Message to Readers

A NOTE FROM THE AUTHOR
hey there reader!!! this is the prologue for my new story! I hope you like it! i will be posting more chapters in the story later. feel free to give any feedback you would like! it is greatly appreciated. hope to hear from you all soon!


Peer Review

The highly descriptive text gave me a good feeling aboit this piece


Perhaps a sentence such as "All their work had led to this", but only if thats actually what this is and if you want to though!


Reviewer Comments

I would love to read the full thing, chapter by chapter