Coeur

United States

girl who likes flowering trees and cats.
biopic drawn for me by my dear friend "bogsoup"

Message to Readers

This is a new poetry style I'm trying out, any feedback on how it reads would be greatly appreciated!

2 Short Poems

November 9, 2020

FREE WRITING

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Rose's Cradle (name up for grabs)

The blushing azure sky
reaches down to cradle, 
the drooping rose 
In its white-spotted hands;
And plants a kiss upon the browning petals,
With golden lips. 

Cold's Revenge (name also not in stone) 

In the wintry thralls,
Upon the north wind where the albatross caws-
Inside the eye of the storm,
Where gray clouds are torn-
by the spindly fingers of lightning. 
Where frost coats the world in a frightening-
Trench-coat o' crushed velvet.
In this place:  
even breathing, (through noses and lips, red and cracked as broken hearts) 
is a gambit. 
 

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3 Comments
  • BizzleWrites

    Replying: Thanks for the peer review! A lot of it was really helpful, I'm definitely going to edit my piece and make it even better.


    6 months ago
  • AJ - Izzy

    re: thank you!
    And woooow the imagery is absolutely stunning, just gorgeous!!! Amazing amazing writing, I'm excited to read more of it! :)


    6 months ago
  • BizzleWrites

    Wow! These are AMAZING!!!! Just - these are SOOO GOOD . . .


    6 months ago