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ANYTHING you can critique is appreciated!!!!
The soft dialogue between the characters is AMAZING. It really feels like they know each-other really well. The beautiful seen-setting is really great too, with so much detail you really feel like you're there.
Understanding more about Ben would be good. Maybe a bit about how he got to be like this, or his background. I also can't tell how old the characters are, so including something about that would be good, though I'd guess maybe late teens or early twenties.
This piece is really good, the characters feel like real people and the story is intriguing. Keep writing, whether it be on this piece or a different one.