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Message to Readers

I've seen a few people use this prompt for their own poem which is so cool and I literally am blown away by all of them. If you decide to do one too, i really don't want to miss any so please link it below in the comments so i can see it :)
(And if this is your first time seeing the piece, it's written as if I were my own best friend)

11/7/2020

My best friend Riley gets sad sometimes

March 9, 2021

FREE WRITING

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I like how she stands with her back to the sun                     and she cuts her hair short
                      and dyes it but says it's just self expression, not feelings.
I like how she thinks she can fool me               I like how she thinks she can lie without repercussion.
     And of course I know she's upset, says she'll likely sever ties with every stranger she sees, but
when my best friend Riley gets sad sometimes I know that they're who she crawls back to.
       Her mind weaves itself like strings entwined in a mess, necklace chains cause she's messy,
               earbud cords cause she doesn't have money,                and
                I like that.
My best friend Riley only wants to be great when nobody's looking, she only sings when the party's died down,
she only dreams when she's sleeping.    My best friend Riley writes things and then shreds them.
 My best friend Riley paints pictures and then scrubs the canvas,
   My best friend Riley gets sad sometimes, and you know--
                     she drives me to the brink of insanity.
I'll listen to one song all the way home, it'll probably be a slow one that talks about safety.
 I like when she picks the music and tells me she'll sing these songs to my children one day.
And her voice isn't very distinct, not at all,      but it makes babies happy      it gets the job done.
I like when she closes her eyes at the sun
I like when they fill and she gulps them away
        I like when she corrects teachers' word choice and can speak up in crowds.
My best friend Riley gets sad sometimes and can't use all those words to say it, but 
I wonder if I'd hear her if she said it out loud.
Her voice isn't very distinct, not at all          but it's read things and said things
and held and freed feelings.
   It rises and falls with the turn of the tides--nondescript
But she's my best friend,
             and I like how it gets the job done.
            

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48 Comments
  • Zirong

    I don't know why but this makes me feel like crying. I hope I can write such brilliant pieces one day.


    5 months ago
  • a rose

    Wow. This got sixty likes? So proud of you. FJDJJDJESJ.
    Also this is scarily accurate


    5 months ago
  • In Which Yaya Writes

    Wow, I mean this is so amazing. So many emotions in here. This is beautiful. I probably can't say much more.
    Except what color is your hair XD?


    6 months ago
  • happy butterfly

    oh my gosh this is so beautiful,i love it so much. i want to write like this some day,you are such an inspiration


    6 months ago
  • The Secret Society of Purple Iguanas of Death Online

    Oh, wow! This was spectacular. I love the way you use the imagery to depict yourself. You write it so we can feel like she’s our friend too. :)


    7 months ago
  • Livsnjutare

    This is really good!!


    7 months ago
  • Jo Rejoicing [ChildOfGod]

    Aw, this is so sad! Here's mine: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/202109/version/413437


    7 months ago
  • Stone of Jade

    I feel really late but here is my piece for this prompt:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201907/version/412923


    7 months ago
  • Dmoral

    i'm probably late to this "trend", but kudos to you for starting it! so here i go for added to this endless string of comments with my link
    https://bit.ly/3lp4pek
    and yeah. i'd properly comment how much i love this piece, but i think you already know ;) <3


    7 months ago
  • katnissromanoff

    This is so great and I tried my own, it isn't as good as yours, but here's the link: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201829/version/412749


    7 months ago
  • SunV

    Okay, so I did one too! I really loved this prompt, and I had a lot of fun doing this.

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/198470/version/412693


    7 months ago
  • Samina

    hey
    i tried something on the prompt, not the best tho :)
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/200897/version/410151


    7 months ago
  • journal.scribbles

    re: aw thank you! <3


    7 months ago
  • Calisa

    This is really good. I tried it out here: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201669/version/412215


    7 months ago
  • SunV

    This is really great! I love the feelings you've conveyed.

    I'm a little confused on the prompt though.... Are we supposed to talk about our best friend, or about ourselves? Eh... I'm a little stupid :)


    7 months ago
  • journal.scribbles

    Thank you, poetri, for inspiring all of us to create our own. I'm 100% with everything chrysanthemums&ink said, but I won't bore you with an attempt to write a comment as well written as theirs (since it's basically impossible). Anyways, beautiful poem, and it's even more beautiful the creativity that you've inspired. I wrote my own here: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201278/version/411831
    Thank you!!!


    7 months ago
  • maryse

    This is genuinely beautiful. Not just your writing (though that is magical in its own right) but the whole movement you've encouraged by doing this. It's a lovely idea. I hope you don't mind but I had a go on my own, I'd love for you to have a look. I was amazed by how relieved I felt afterwards, sometimes it's nice to romanticise yourself for a little while. Thank you.
    Link is: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201491/version/411797


    7 months ago
  • chrysanthemums&ink

    held off liking until i got my own thing out. i love this piece so much, and even if i wasn't planning on taking part (i couldn't resist the urge), i would've come back to it over and over again. your tone when writing poetry is so uniquely yours,. the emotions are expressed so well, almost like i'm sitting across from you having an actual conversation. this is a terrible comment, but i really really love this.

    i realize i'm a little late to the party, and i know you're kind enough to check all of these wonderful pieces out, so there's no pressure to take a look at mine. lol, this prompt really started a lot, didn't it? i feel like you kind of just have that power, to inspire other people. i'm thankful, because i never thought there'd be something like this in wtw ever again. thank you.
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201399/version/411640


    7 months ago
  • Rose A(hiatus)

    SIDENOTE: O. M. Gosh. I just realized I wasn't following you. Fixing that right now.


    7 months ago
  • Rose A(hiatus)

    I love this piece and this prompt! It's amazing how many people you've influenced. I just posted my own if you'd like to check it out. :)
    Here it is https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201343/version/411390


    7 months ago
  • LaurenBeeWrites

    This is beautiful, really really raw. I just found your page. It takes a lot to write like this and I admire you for it. PS I saw your bio and fun fact: I listened to the light behind your eyes for the first time today...kinda want to do a prompt on it, now. MCR is an amazing band, them and TOP have helped me through so much. <3 Keep on writing! Know your not alone!


    7 months ago
  • Wisp

    Replying: Even your gibberish is poetic. And thanks for the kind words, they mean so much from a writer of your caliber! I don't drink coffee, but if you ever want to talk about emotions, I'm all for it ;) sometimes I speak with my friends about it and I don't know, sometimes I feel like they just don't understand what I'm feeling??? Wishing you the best as well, take care of yourself lots and remember how loved you are :)


    7 months ago
  • Wisp

    Read this yesterday on the other place, and then liked it here. Anyways, your use of emotion is just so brilliant and I adore the way you've weaved the prompt together. There's a poetic beauty in the way you've written it, down from the formatting to the diction and just whole piece itself in all its entirety. You've always had a way with words, and your newest pieces are just so breathtaking (Staten island girl and this one) in a whole new level. Just eternally lovely and I have to say I've missed your writing a lot. I'm just thrilled to see you back, even if it may be a short while :)
    (Also, you're such an icon! Creating a whole movement here, kinda reminds me of #giveusourwords back ;))

    Here's my own version, if you want to read it:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201107/version/411210


    7 months ago
  • Westley

    Absolutely beautiful!


    7 months ago
  • sci-Fi

    Hey!!! Posted my own version :)
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201203/version/411068


    7 months ago
  • anemoia by a thread

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201206/version/411028
    this was so much fun but also deeply revealing. brilliant idea.


    7 months ago
  • anemoia by a thread

    i am going to do this. i hope. because while i couldn't hope to match anyone's, this idea is so intriguing. the way you took this and looked inside to write it... stunning.


    7 months ago
  • BlueWolf (Semi Hiatus)

    I love this!!!! Just amazing!!! Fantastic writing!!! Speechless!!!!


    7 months ago
  • mirkat

    re: oh my god really you like it? so many people have said they like my name too but its harder for me for some reason. thank you for your kind comments and such! they make me smile! <3<3<3


    7 months ago
  • Ibex

    here's a link to my attempt at something nice: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201099/version/410729
    anyways though i love your work so much; it's all just so beautiful


    7 months ago
  • mirkat

    my version if you want! (yours is ever so much better):
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201096/version/410733


    7 months ago
  • crystalline•galaxies

    this piece is so, so meaningful. it's so sweet and emotional, and i've reread it three times already.

    i gave the prompt a go; it's nowhere near as polished as yours, but it was definitely a serious self-examination that i enjoyed writing:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201070/version/410680


    7 months ago
  • WordsSpeakLouder

    This was so satisfying to read. There are so many elements tying it all together into something so amazing. You're a fantastic writer.


    7 months ago
  • mirkat

    oh this is phenomenal! the formatting and language and all that jazz just pull me in and this is so relatable and ahhhh i gotta try it some time! <3<3<3


    7 months ago
  • rwong

    heyyyy i loveee this poem so muchhhhh <3 i wrote a response though let me just warn you: YOUR'S IS WAY BETTER ALONG WITH LOCHNESSIE'S AND PAISLEY BLUE'S
    anyway here's mine: https://www.writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/201022/version/410497
    :D


    7 months ago
  • a rose

    This is lowkey adorable. Some of the lines are just !!!!, including but not limited to "I like how she thinks she can fool me", and the bit about the necklace/ the earbuds. However, you do have a distinct voice so you're wrong. You sound like a nonproblematic Lana Del Ray.


    7 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    re: you're so sweet, thank you! I'm so amazed with how supportive and kind this community is--even after months and months, it still makes me smile. I'm starting to figure myself out a little bit, I think. Very slowly. But hey, I've got my whole life. Right now, I think I might be either genderfluid/bigender/demigirl, but I still have research and waiting and reflection to do. Thank you so much for your support, it means SO much to me <3
    I'm glad you liked my poem!


    7 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    Hey, i tried out the prompt! :) https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/200927/version/410277 check it out if you feel like it! thanks so much for the inspiration :D


    7 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Oh. My. Gosh. Riley!! This is so beautiful. Honestly I aspire to write as well as you do.


    7 months ago
  • that one rat from ratatouille

    just realized i wasn’t following you... i’m so dumb >~< anyways i love this


    7 months ago
  • lochnessie

    re: ... (refrains from saying well yours IS BETTER and sticking tongue out) thank you for sharing the great prompt! and yours is b- amazing


    7 months ago
  • Lata.B

    Woah i love this! You wrote this so well!


    7 months ago
  • ANSON REYNOLDS

    re: THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE COMMENT <3333
    and your poem is amazing - I loved the beginning and the earbuds line, mannnnn I can relate :)


    7 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    when i read this poem, i was wondering who is riley lol i forgot your real name,


    7 months ago
  • lochnessie

    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/200913/version/410251
    :) :) :)


    7 months ago
  • lochnessie

    re: yay thank you! <3


    7 months ago
  • lochnessie

    i adore this!! your writing is amazing :) could i try out this prompt??


    7 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    Woah—I love this! Its really beautiful! What an interesting prompt—would you mind if I try it out? :)) so good to hear from you!!


    7 months ago