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The first sentence! And then the gorgeous imagery and setting details. You do things with words that I can only dream of.
Lear shocked me, I admit. I didn't expect him to be a literal crow, but it's unique and powerful. It gives him a broader perspective. The fact that he has such deep power and interesting thoughts as a bird makes him come alive. The hints at past feuds and interactions with his people also give him backstory and make him seem wise and ancient, yet fearful and desperate.
Also, did you choose the name Lear from the Shakespeare play, or just because?
I don't think so. It all flows so well.
ABSOLUTELY! Every word draws me into this ancient place, this palace, the cathedral, the medieval/renaissance-ness, the ruins, the wintery feel.
You truly, really, absolutely, have a gift for stringing words into sentences that form paragraphs that weave stories. The sentences on their own are lovely and just make me sigh in appreciation. All together, in the story, they bring it to life.
Did I say it all yet? I can't think of anything that needs cutting or changing, honestly. If you're looking to whittle down the word count, well... that might be hard, because every word feels integral and powerful.