Paisley Blue

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they/them | 6.2.2020
genderfluid | christian

Message to Readers

Just realized I wrote a poem like, a few months ago by the same name... I think I unpublished it, though, which was good, because it was NOT my best work. It was about dance. *facepalm* well, I hope this is a little better! ;)
Hope you're all having a good night/day/evening, whatever it is for you!

and again

November 3, 2020

FREE WRITING

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against the black of night, the world looks so dirty and grey
a sickly off-white, speckled with dust and broken hearts,
there's no one left to save us. there's nothing left but the
nostalgia that lingers in the corners of dark rooms, among
the broken eggshells and cloths stained with the dusk.
yet somehow you still make me
raise my head to the sky. in the looming silence, your voice
echoes, the sun still rises.

so i wait for the mornings, breathlessly watching for
the first sign of a light that will lift me
from my fallen stance. i drape expectancy over
every discarded dream and fallen star, anticipation writhing
in my very veins. and as the sun brightens the very tops of the trees,
you take my hand and show me how hope never really dies
how only our bodies manage to stay hidden from the light
and even as the night falls, i hear you in my mind,
whispering through the calm, the sun still rises.

as the world grows dark once more, i force my lungs
to accept each tired breath. the moon calls to me but still
i grasp the curtains, i will not let it whisk me away
without seeing the rise of a new day. my cries lash out
fraying the edges of the world, taking hold of the darkness,
steadying me as i take another step. with the last of my strength,
i turn towards the sky. there, above the clouds, i see the light.

the sun still rises, again and again.
the sun still rises, again and again. 

the sun still rises, again and again. [wait for the sunrise]
the sun still rises, again and again. [watch for the light]
the sun still rises, again and again. [and again]
and again. [and again]
and again. [and again]

and again

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14 Comments
  • Starlitskies

    Hey Ella! (Is it fine to call u that?) Thank you again for you help! I just published a poem and I'd love your feedback on it! Have a great day! <3
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/208960/version/430817


    9 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Re: Oh my gosh! You have no idea how much that helped! Thank you thank you thank you! It means so much to me that you took time to write all of that! The examples you gave totally made sense, and yes I can see how one is staggered and one is rushed! Like I'm awed that the position of just one word created a whole new vibe. Let me know too if you need help with anything! Much love! <3<3


    9 months ago
  • Starlitskies

    Can I just say this poem is the epitome of hope? The ending is simply stunning! Literally took my breath away! Congratulations on getting published in the Cathartic Lit Magazine! You definitely deserve that. :)
    Also, could you help me out a bit? I've read a lot of your work and adore how you use line breaks to amplify the meanings. Any tips on how to do that? I'm so bad at line breaks, so I just stick with poetic prose, but that's not the same thing. Haha! :D


    9 months ago
  • Stone of Jade

    this is gorgeous!
    also...the new draft is out if you wanna check it out -- no pressure tho ;)
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/199969/version/409732

    im working on finding a piece of yours to review in return!


    11 months ago
  • pyrrhic

    re: thank you so much, ella. i love you so much, and i'm so glad i have you as a friend <333


    11 months ago
  • lochnessie

    dear ella,
    all the hope and all the luck, still. my teacher cancelled our science class so we could watch the map. when Minnesota went blue i said 'i have a friend in Minnesota!'. my friends here in Australia wish you and your country all of the lamington luck we possibly can, and all the people who would be impacted by the swing of one state. i'm not really sure why i wrote this comment... but i hope it helps to know that there is love and support 15,187 kilometers away, no matter what happens.
    ness <3


    11 months ago
  • dead account

    <3


    11 months ago
  • antizoeclub

    this is so so gorgeous omg, i love "i drape expectancy over every discarded dream and fallen star" and that stunning first section was such a hook whew <333
    also, re: thank you for all the sweet words!! it's been nice to hear from you in the comments the couple times that i've come back around here lately, and reading your writing is no different a joy :'))


    11 months ago
  • lochnessie

    this is beautiful and i adore it
    and re: thank you! and yeah, Australia is down to zero cases so things have been pretty normal here for a while which is great. best of luck for... today? we're something like a day ahead so yeah dates stuff is weird on that... all the luck and lamingtons. love wins <3


    11 months ago
  • mirkat

    ahhhh everything you write is splendiferous and this is just beyond. it gave me hope.... these lines tho.... : "my cries lash out
    fraying the edges of the world, taking hold of the darkness,
    steadying me as i take another step. with the last of my strength,
    i turn towards the sky. there, above the clouds, i see the light."
    thank you ella. <3


    11 months ago
  • pyrrhic

    AHHHHHHHHHH I AM LITERALLY OBSESSED WITH THE STRAWBERRY SHORTCAKE... i love this piece so much it's unreal


    11 months ago
  • midnight.summerrose

    Re: and you deserve every single one!! :)


    11 months ago
  • midnight.summerrose

    Btw you have 180 followers now congratulationssss!!! :)


    11 months ago
  • midnight.summerrose

    Wow, this is incredible! It's so powerful and beautiful! I need some of your talent!! :)


    11 months ago