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I absolutely love cli-fi, and you've done such an impressive job here!! Hurricane Season suggests the plot and gives the readers insight into the story before they even begin.
You don't mention the main character too much, which I get, since it's told from her perspective. I think it could be really interesting if you find a way to tell us the main character's age, and change the story based on how someone of that age would view the story. If this connects to you personally, (I've never gone through a hurricane or had to evacuate) you could include more emotion in certain parts of the scene. Why is the father so intent on getting the boat fixed?
I think the boat scene at the beginning could be more descriptive, which you have done an exceptional job of throughout the rest of the story. The beginning scene kind of set the mood, place, and time period for the whole story, and for most of those elements the reader just has to guess based on details you provided here and there. I think you could add a little suspense dispersed throughout the story at some of the climaxes, adding a solitary sentence about how quiet it was, or something outside in nature that reflects how the conversation is going inside the house.
At first, before southern tropical storms were mentioned, I could see the story taking place in a swamp kind of landscape, with rain and lots of humidity, all based off of the first paragraph, which is awesome! One of my favorite parts of this piece were "Once they’ve gone inside, the air returns to its warm, fluid state, and the birds start chirping again. But still, even in the heat of the Southern summer, I can’t shake the chill of my mother’s voice; goosebumps ripple up my arms in waves of shivers." This describes so many things soooo well in such a short excerpt!
I can tell you've been working on this story for a long time! It was a pleasure to give feedback here, and the piece was so nice to read. The ending was very dramatic, I liked it a lot.
If you have any questions about my feedback please ask!! Best of luck in the competition