Pavithra C.P

India

"Reading is dreaming with open eyes"
15 years old (2020)
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Budding author
Books are a treasure <3 <3
Indian
Karate black belt
Dancer
Reading & writing= My passion
<3 <3 <3

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I am quite new to the atmosphere around here. I am just a 9th grader as of 2020 :) and this is my first blog. I hope to get maximum support from you guys. I am open to all sorts of critique to improvise myself!! Be my fans and I will be yours, well a bigger one :)
Feel free to surf through my work when you find time.
Thank you
LOVE YOU GUYS!!

The Concealed Beauty

October 30, 2020

FREE WRITING

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"Mirror, mirror, who is the prettiest of them all?"
"You my dear, You are the prettiest of them all"

Yes, I am the concealed beauty.

The niqab is stuck
to the beads of sweat
I might as well tape it
for their good,
and for my own.

I don't want gasps
to leave their mouths.
I don't want the whispers
to weigh me down.
I don't want them to wet their pants
Just because of me.

I don't want to be the cause
of their nightmares.
I don't want the pity shower 
to drain me down.
I don't want them to bulge their eyes
Just because of me.

I run,
from the whispers, the stares,
the looks, the pity,
the smirks and the gasps.
I run, 
to my sole comfort.

*reveals*

"Mirror, mirror, who is the prettiest of them all?"
"You my dear, You are the prettiest of them all"
I hope you all liked this poem....Any feedback is appreciated!
Thank you :)))

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7 Comments
  • midnight.summerrose

    This is really good!! I love it!! :)


    11 months ago
  • SunV

    Also, it's so cool that you're a karate black belt!


    11 months ago
  • SunV

    I love this, I love your perspective of 'what beauty is'. I have the same suggestion as Doodleninja, try to use a variation of words.

    This is the first time I've come across your profile, so I just wanted to say hi!


    11 months ago
  • doodleninja

    I like how you took the take of "the burden of beauty"! You executed it super well! Maybe you could add stronger verbs, like instead of the repetition of "I run", you could do "I flee" or "I elude the crowds", just to add more imagery.
    But lovely writing! :D


    11 months ago
  • Huba Huba

    It flows very well! I love the intensity!


    11 months ago
  • pyrrhic

    this is so good! i love the flow! it all just seems to fit together! beautiful


    11 months ago
  • Rachaelgrace

    This is really good!! I’m glad to have discovered you! :)


    11 months ago