CrazyNinjaKid

Australia

14 - leo - introvert
she/her
music || swimming || writer
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Message to Readers

first song i've written in a while :)

I know (song) - feedback please / review swaps :)

November 5, 2020

FREE WRITING

14

I've seen the way she feels,
Despite the lies of being a-ok, 
She paints her face in laughs
But they are almost always fake 

I see the depths of the mountains
That everyday she has to overtake
There is a small echo 
It is the pain that she keeps hidden away

I know her
signs,
I know when she is hurting deep inside
I know when
It's not her greatest of days
I know
she doesn't want to live this way 

She hides her heart so deep,
Its impossible to know what she thinks
She claims that she never cries
But I've always seen through the lies,

I know her 
signs,
I know when she is hurting deep inside
I know when 
It's not her greatest of days
I know 
she doesn't want to live this way 

She won't look me in the eye,
Although I've tried to do this countless times,
I can feel her pain,
I know she tries to hide it with her laughing ways,
​But what if the laughs are screams of pain?

I see the depths of the mountains 
That everyday she has to overtake
I know she tries to hide it with her crazy laughing ways,
​What if the laughs are screams of pain?

I know her 
signs,
I know when she is hurting deep inside
I know when 
It's not her greatest of days
I know 
she doesn't want to live this way 

I know her 
signs,
I know when 
It's not her greatest of days
I know her 
signs,
I know when she is hurting deep inside
I know 
she doesn't want to live this way 
 
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11 Comments
  • alex.webber

    This is actually so cool! I love the flow


    about 2 months ago
  • Bluesno

    Thanks for reviewing my piece! Really value your feedback :)


    2 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    This. Is. Freaking. Gorgeous!!!! <3 love ya ninja


    2 months ago
  • JonesyL123

    This is amazing! I love the beautiful detail you added. Keep writing!


    2 months ago
  • Bluesno

    I feel like this could be directed at me? It is so beautiful... you truly have a way with words <3


    3 months ago
  • AJ - Izzy

    Wow, this is amazing. My heart just stopped for a quick second there to admire the feeling, that's how great it is! :DD


    3 months ago
  • Hrithik Sharma

    Beautiful


    3 months ago
  • Rose A. (semi hiatus)

    How do you do this so perfectly! I can only write songs in the shower. Obviously, that doesn't work out... my paper gets wet(joking). Yeah, this is super good! You're so talented. Also... your bio says you play guitar so I got excited because I just got a guitar! Do you have tips for someone who can only play Seven Nation Army(slowly)?


    3 months ago
  • Anna_19

    Oh my god, this is amazing, way better than any song I've written, and i have two notebooks full. Keep writing!


    3 months ago
  • Lata.B

    I love this song! Wow yup ik this feeling way too well


    3 months ago
  • Samina

    I feel this


    3 months ago