ChocolateKiwi

United States

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I’m Kiara,
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Active since June 2, 2020

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Say Something, I love You

November 11, 2020

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I don’t want to lose you because...

Because...

I...

I love you.

I love you,

Say something,

Anything,

Please.

I can’t lose you

Your the only one I love.

I have had these strong feelings for you 

For a while,

I just haven’t told you.

Please say something,

Anything.

I love you.
Okay so this may or may not be true... Yeah well I hoped you enjoyed, this is really not my style of writing but I had the idea so... Yeah

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9 Comments
  • beth r.

    ahhhh this hits me in the fEeLs


    4 months ago
  • Oaklandhattie

    This poem is heartbreakingly gorgeous. The space you leave in between the lines is perfectly done so it sounds like something someone would actually say. Good job.


    4 months ago
  • Riku-San

    This sounds like it could be real


    4 months ago
  • In Which Yaya Writes

    This is really sweet! It’s simple yet a really nice read. Great job!


    4 months ago
  • Rose A

    Replying to your footnotes: I did enjoy this! And I'm glad you experimented outside of your comfort zone. I agree with katnissromanoff. It's simple, it's deep, it's stunning, all at the same time.


    4 months ago
  • katnissromanoff

    Oh my gosh, I seriously love this. It's so relatable and beautifully written. It's simple but really deep and stunning. Amazing!!!


    4 months ago
  • Rachaelgrace (hiatus) :)

    This is really good. I love the rythme and way that you wrote it. Nice job!


    4 months ago
  • doodleninja

    love the formatting of this! I can imagine the narrator stammering, slowly choosing their words, yet they're sincere and firm. Lovely work!


    4 months ago
  • em wilder

    awww, yay! it is brave of you to write this and well yeah.... this actually reminded me of a song called say something, i'm giving up on you by a great big world. it's kinda a sad song but like also hopeful. if you want more song recs check out a piece i did a while back just called songs. welllllllppp have a good rest of your day/afternoon/evening! <3


    4 months ago