Huba Huba

United States

Writer, poet, musician, wanna-be-botanist.
Sleep deprived.
Call me a monster, I put milk in before the cereal.
I'm probably eating ramen right now or having a mental breakdown.
Imagine having an aesthetic bio
Joined: May 26, 2020

Message to Readers

I completed the poem that I plan to submit to Scholastic this year. Though, I'd like some peers to review it. Thank you.

When Branta Canadensis Go South

October 27, 2020

FREE WRITING

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When Branta Canadensis Goes South

The screen on my window blurs my view, but I see
the leaves go from a fresh green to gold and vermillion. 
The air chills to make us put colorful wool over our heads,
so there’s no green apple of the red, 
and we’re a mass of emotions and flesh. 
I wonder why all my friends like blue? 

When Branta Canadensis Goes South

Only when I lay still, and examine the clouds,
I realize that clouds move. 
Clouds are like herds of elephants, 
traveling with their families from place to place, 
and no one needs a home as long as they’re with each other. 
I’ve never seen the same cloud formation in one place. 

When Branta Canadensis Goes South

My crimson rose garden evanesces, 
and my tomatoes and squashes pass away.
Life flows out of my garden like an endless flux, 
but the seeds I traded for a cow, 
metamorphose into a beanstalk reaching the sky, 
and I grieve my sacrifice for the cow. 

When Branta Canadensis Goes South

Why don’t I feel warm with you? 
Our embraces bring fatigue, 
while our conversations are so monotonous
so I wonder who I am to you, 
and who you are to me. 
They say it’s time to let go. 

Yet...

Yet my family still chatters,
egg tart aroma lingers in our kitchen, 
my sister still sings like the Gavia immer, 
the shower is always equipped with shampoo, 
gravity still pulls apples down on people’s heads, 
but everyone around me always raises me up. 

When Branta Canadensis Goes South, 
    I know they’ll come back. 








 
Too many of my pieces begin with "when"

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10 Comments
  • Rachaelgrace

    This is really good! Also I lovvve ramen and Calvin and Hobbes hehe
    Re: thank you so much :)


    11 months ago
  • AbellePuppy34

    Haven't read this just yet, but I will take a look at it and review it for you very soon! Can't wait!


    11 months ago
  • Abrianna

    Re: uhm, yup not my reason. haha. I do it because I don't like to much milk so I can see how much I pour better than with cereal in it.


    11 months ago
  • JayceeRae

    thank-you and do i say Re: before these? i wrote a piece on ben if you want to read


    11 months ago
  • Abrianna

    Re: I don't know yet, it was sorta a trial piece to see if I want to write more like that.:)
    That's so cool, you know what? I pour milk in before cereal too! Always have don't know why.xd


    11 months ago
  • JayceeRae

    no i havent deleted any pieces (i joined write the two weeks ago) i am planning on going into more detail on each of the characters.


    11 months ago
  • JayceeRae

    thank-you for telling me that and i want the character so seem simply complex if you know what i mean. each with seemingly perfect lives and struggles of their own


    11 months ago
  • Vicarious

    This is amazing!!!! Writing a review right now :)


    11 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    ahhhh i love this!! I'll write a review if i have time today :)


    11 months ago
  • Anlee

    ill submit a review for this piece :)
    re: "oi Felix! come here bro!" was the first thing that came to mind when I read that Felix is somewhat your bias. his duality is so amazing


    11 months ago