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I really enjoyed the retelling in this format. I love harry potter and fantasy stories are always so good in verse. The flow was excellent. I could read the rhythm.
One of the best things about poetry is its ability to illict emotion. This is why poets usually prioritize the feeling of a poem over the events taking place. This poem did a great job of retelling the story but I could feel the emotion as deeply as I wanted to. Talk about harry's relationship with Sirius, hagrids relationship with buckbeak, lupins relationship with himself. Give me some stanzas that are just raw emotion. I know you can do it because I can tell you are a good writer and are really passionate about this story.
Any time their were slant rhyme I commented. Slant rhymes are a pet peeve of mine, but alot of great poets (e.g. Emily Dickenson) use them. So if you are okay with slant rhymes, just disregard those.