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So this is my first piece. Some critique would be nice just to see how my structuring/arguments are. Also some comments on your take on my opinions in here would be nice as I would always like to keep possibly expanding this.
It's an argumentative essay about the existence of God, with the author not believing in any particular religion or God.
Your insightful comments, such as how we tend to accept differences for everything save religion and your statements regarding the human mind.
I'd really like you to put down why we fear the unknown. Since the idea has practically become a cliche at this point, citing a rational for this fear is a good idea.
You might want to bring into the last paragraph the fact that people are afraid of endings: they don't want to believe that life ends. It goes against our survival instinct. Others rationalize their beliefs because life has been filled with so much struggle and pain, they should get a reward of some sort (afterlife). Still others recognize a god of some form because they believe there has to be more to life than just living. Including different viewpoints help strengthen your piece and ultimately the conclusion you come to.