Peer Review by The Dreamer (South Africa)

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Kingdom of Light

By: Anna_19


There's a place out there,
That never darkens.
A kingdom that plays in the wind,
And doesn't have tears to fall.
A city that laughs in the sun,
And never has hurt to show.
A place that loves with the seasons,
And can't place any blame.
A realm that only has joy,
And no blue except in the rainbow.
A country that has no clouds,
And no rain to flood the Earth.
A province that has only stars,
And no darkness to show them.
A nation where one is all,
And all are one through everything.
An empire of family,
And lets nothing but joy in.

There's a kingdom out there,
It's called the kingdom of light,
Where beauty is a precious thing,
And everybody has it.
Where life is a valuable thing,
And nobody takes it away.
Where money has no price,
And cannot buy happiness.
Where pain does not rule,
But is still there enough to show.
The kingdom of light was built on pain,
But sadness doesn't rein to hate.

Thanks for reading, and as always, keep writing!

Message to Readers

Please review.

Peer Review

I loved the mystery and magic behind this piece. It made me feel so joyous and happy and left me thinking...what if?

I would really like to know more about the people. How they interact with each other - families, neighbours, friends, etc.

Reviewer Comments

I really enjoyed this piece and it was a refreshing change from descriptions of dilapidated, run-down and corupt cities.