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I have been delighted by how you 'invent' and 'use' new metaphors and symbolism in describing this Kingdom that is so lovely! I tried highlighting a few of them but they are all superb!
There are a few places that presented confusion, I highlighted them and left a few descriptions as well as suggestions for some. And also, If you could work on your ending once more, in the first lines, you show us how this place is one of joy and no sadness but you end saying that pain is there; this leaves me with some confusion after I read the last lines.
It was relieving reading through your piece, hope you find my suggestions helpful! and yes, they are all suggestions, feel free to pick out what works for you!
Thanks and keep up the great works!