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To believe that your room has so much power, you have such a vivid imagination in your own bubble -- which is your room. What really moved me was the progression of the poem - the overall flow. I loved how it was solemn and gray, you wouldn't expect there to be some sort of happy ending. But then as the poem continues to go on, the fact that the narrator takes a risk as things start turning up, I love it so much!
I'd like to know more about what caused it, like metaphorically. What caused the sky to become gray, which made the stars suffer enough to make one final cry. To have made the narrator so stuck. For the most part, there was such a nice flow that there wouldn't be a lot more to add!
Thank you for writing such a beautiful piece like this. I'm truly looking forward to more amazing pieces! I was able to relate heavily and continue with the amazing writing dear