Mpm#1

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I'm not sure where I'm going, so I'll keep wandering until I get there!
Books, Cross-country, Soccer, Music, Musicals, and anything somewhat peculiar.

Message to Readers

Version 2 of this poem!
All feedback is welcome!

Look at me

October 10, 2020

FREE WRITING

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I was wrong
But hey.
At least I gave it a go. 

At least I took that step.
At least I made that choice.

And even though I’m falling

I’m falling due to my own judgement.

And that makes me smile

in this disgrace.

So my apologies
and my condolences to you
for being let down by me.

But I’m human
and that means sometimes

I’m a lovely little disaster.
I added a bit and changed the beginning. Nothing too big, but I think it sounds better.

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12 Comments
  • Rachaelgrace

    Wow! Super good :)
    Re: Thanks for the comment on my work! So kind!


    7 months ago
  • mirkat

    Yes, this is so amazing! "I'm a lovely little disaster" Love it!
    Re: Thank you for your kind comments on my work!


    7 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    I love this. Too true. The last line is my favorite!
    Re: I remember Emeth! He was really an honest guy on the wrong side of the war. I've never thought about it like that. You've got me thinking for sure now...


    7 months ago
  • RemovedUser1

    Replying: Yeah, it was really cool. I'm glad I got to do it. And it is very unrealistic!! I would yell at them every time, XD! Thanks!


    7 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Re: Thanks, me too! :)


    7 months ago
  • happygiggles

    This is super good, especially the last line! I love it!


    7 months ago
  • Emi

    The last line is just really cool, and masterfully phrased! I like how this pieces accepts who you are, that you're human and can't be perfect on your own.


    7 months ago
  • KBridget

    re: ahh okay, Thank you


    7 months ago
  • KBridget

    re: No, actually it was a reference to my favorite book series. My name and pic is that of the main character lol. Also, what did your first comment mean?


    7 months ago
  • RemovedUser1

    That ending, though! That’s so cute! This is kinda bittersweet, since messing up is no fun. But I like it!
    Replying: Oof, that sound TERRIBLE. It hurts pretty bad- but only when someone touches it or I move it. So, I got to sit around all day until I go to the ortho, XD. But thanks!


    7 months ago
  • anemoia (#words)

    Rings true with me! Simple, but real and beautiful.


    7 months ago
  • Booklover12

    Such a beautiful piece! I love how true it is, and the last line gave me a smile!


    7 months ago