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I'm actually really glad you wrote your speech on sexism, not many writers here actually feel mature enough to enter such a topic.
I try not to be aware of the issue of privilege and sexism because it often hurts to think about it. I think that the more I think, the more aware I am, the more invisibly guilty I'll become. Reading your speech, I know I can't ignore it, and now I want to invest in it now more than ever. We can't have the same on running problem and bring the next generation up thinking that it's okay.
Be careful about how much information is expressed, narrow down numbers so they won't be a mouth full, and be sure to communicate your desired tone.
Don't spiral off-topic when getting passionate about the subject, that is often the downfall of a speech
Stay passionate, you're doing great. Suggestions are just suggestions, and that's all a review is. I really hope to at least see this at least as a finalist.