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Message to Readers
I recently watched The Social Dilemma, and that gave me a huge inspiration boost for this speech...so if you're a returning reader, hope you like the revisions!
And if you're new, be sure to leave a comment and let me know what you think!
Thank you @mystifiedtulip for the wonderful review!!
All of it :) But seriously, I loved this speech about speech. It's so important to use words but at the same time be respectful and receptive to the way other people think.
I'm a pretty quite person in general. I think that's mostly because I'm afraid people are going to judge me for what I say. This speech really encouraged me to speak out. To show the world how I am going to change it. It really made me think about how I as a teenager have the ability to speak out and I don't use it. Whereas people from other societies don't have the ability and want desperately to be able to speak.
I know you are at your word limit, so feel free not to take my suggestions, but I feel like if you included more personal experience, it would really be compelling. Maybe talk about a time you have spoken out and you felt rejected or a time that you didn't speak out and you wish you did.
WOW!!! just wow!!! I can't wait to see a final draft and see the video of you doing this speech!! It's such an important topic that people don't hear about enough.
Great job!!! As always, feel free to take as many or ignore as many of my suggestions as you would like. Whatever you do, I am sure you can only make it better!!!