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Message to Readers
Draft 3! Comments and reviews appreciated!
You're fourteen. And you're an amazing writer! This speech made me clap [literally] and I can't help but say, this is one of the best competition entries to date I've ever read. It's inspiring, it's hilarious, and it has a flavor all its own that only a good piece of writing can provide. I'm in awe of this speech. I would totally recommend you recording an audio of this speech because I-AM-WOWED.
The issue is unique in itself and highlights why a fourteen-year-old deserves to be president. And the reasons are something I've never thought of before. I'm thirteen myself, and my thinking process isn't this creative. The issue is new in itself, let alone seeing it in a whole new light.
The thing is, you've sort of highlighted why ANY fourteen-year-old could be president. If this thing's a campaign speech, it would need more convincing on the 'why YOU should be president' part. I mean, I'm not hinting at you self-centering yourself in this speech, but what I'm saying is, people need a reason why YOU ALONE should be president, right? Feel free to disagree with me. I'm voting for you anyways because this is a speech only a future president could deliver:)
You are an awesome writer [and fourteen-year-old], so keep writing. I can only say that I wish you the best of luck for this competition, and I think this is a potential winner. Wishing you the best of luck [again], and I've also highlighted a few errors, mostly grammatical if you would like to check them out. Not that it really matters, I guess, because this is a speech, not a novel.
You go, fourteen-year-old girl:) keep being the wonderful writer you are!